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Old 07-15-02, 06:44 AM   #1
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down to one bullet part 2

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yo its now been a few years since u were let out of prision//
as ur walkin home u see a little bit of crimson//
right outside ur house ten u have a flashback and tis was tha place were tha lady lied died//
but u try to block it out so u thought of somtin else instead//
but durin tha case tha feds couldnt find tha gun so tat means its still around//
must be hidin somewhere on tha ground//
as u go searchin thru tha thick grass u hit somtin hard and feels mettalic in a way//
so ur gonna wait till night turns to day//
to look for tha object u felt but couldnt move it or budge it//
so now u have i from out tha ground u noticed it still had one bullet left in it//
so u got framed for a murder which u didnt com-mit//
u think back to tha day u fell and u relized u fell cause u were gazing at a comet//
not payin attention u fell and a gun was fired//
wen u arose u found out u were in tha back of a cop car and a bit to tired//
so now u try to find out wat happen and before u kno it, tha lights wen out//

part 3 soon
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Old 07-15-02, 06:46 AM   #2
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DAMN GRAPHIC BUT COULD BE MORE COMPLEX AS FAR AS STORY THIS WAS ILLNESS
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Old 07-15-02, 06:52 AM   #3
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acidic u really just gotta learn to be more creative wit ya rhymes. this could be more like a poem than a proper spit ya kno? its just the vocab was kinda basic and flow sorta diddnt really progress from part 1.
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Old 07-15-02, 06:57 AM   #4
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^^ i agree.. .. the idea is koo but it needs better wordin.. ..keep at it


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Old 07-15-02, 07:18 AM   #5
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thanx for tha feed back ima switch it up next time
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