30bars, first ta 5 votes, no dickridin or crew votes, lemme post my llbl verse and ill come back and post my verse for this shit.
Peace.

Jus a keystyle, match bars or whateva mufucka,i oculd careless.




Ima have ta crush u like the incredible hulk ................... heard u buy yo rhymes in bulk........................................
im seein u start ta sulk.............................................. ....
so now ur bound ta skulk............................................. ..
as i get ta emcee slayin............................................ .....
u wanna win? hit up tha pope and u two can get to prayin....
u couldnt spit nuthin hellish if u teamed up wit satan.........
u'll never be creatin,or rockin tha house....................
less u stick ta masturbatin,in tha puss of ya spouse.....
dont front son..........ur scared and intimidated by my circumlocution.........................u know ima win this battle with no fuckin confusion..........or confrontation................
call this tha lyrical desiccation................dont even try ta sweat me im immune ta persperation...................ya rhymes stink like flatulation....................this blind fool cant see me................Ill is tha lyrical preacher and ur rhymes tha peccavi...............if u was livin in tha 60's u still wouldnt be "outofsite"................out of style is tha type a shit that'd fit jus right....................if rap was studied in shaolin temples id be tha archimandrite.....................u'll lose this battle to me and id wreck u ina fistfight...............if ya fuckin with Ill............................if u brought a certificate a authenticity u still couldnt keep it real.......................its yo fate im here ta seal.....................its jus my goal for tha moment..................u asked to battle me but tha gods wont condone it..................they see tha mismatch cus ive shown it.....................without a shadow of doubt.............im tha king yung buck, ur jus tha emcee roustabout................i got too much fuckin clout......................so now this battle is over.......................fuck tha luck of tha irish i'll give u tha figure 4 leaf clover............................



SKULK--To lie in hiding, as out of cowardice or bad conscience.
CIRCUMLOCUTION--The use of unnecessarily wordy and indirect language.
PECCAVI--A confession of sin.
ARCHIMANDRITE--the superior of an abbey of monks.
ROUSTABOUT--A circus laborer.


Sum more questionable vocab ta clear up

waitin on outofsite, that mufuckas prolly gonna be out of site for a while after this one.

jus a key, im not sure how many bars, jus match or dont or whatever.
Peace.

waitin on site

hey ill reply tonight im at work right now

u still at work man? gimme a break.
Peace.

sorry i been busy

hey yo here i go

first off son you ignorant/its kinda scary/how u try to have an abundant vocabulary/u think u da bomb/but u wack lookin up yo rhymes on dictionary.com/sayin ull beat me in a fist fight/dont challenge me unless u gonna come off tight/thas some corny shit/dont even attempt to spit/call yo self illrhymephonetic/u aint ill them weak rhymes must be genetic/Sayin i asked to battle u son?/remember who challenged who son/your ignorance is showin through again/claim to be straight but u only hit on men/u bes check yo homo tendencies/u got gay related dependencies/dogg u jus a hater/ill call u the lyrical masterbater/now u need to admit u lost/like trash u got tossed/i said it before ill say it again/for outofsite its another win/

uppin 4 votes
Peace.

Vote= Outofsite..

LoL Damn, IRP im sorry but the only thing you had in your verse that was good was.. well nothing really.. It was to "basic"...

::work on::
Your rhyme scheme- make sure it flows
Your mutlis, try an get like 3 diffrent rhymes in 2 bars..
Metaphors- you REALLY need to work on these, itll help your verse not only look alot better, but itll help tone your skills an make you come out harder..
Punchs - weres the hard personals?? weres the line making me laugh at how stupid yoru opponent is???

OutOfSite

your verse lackd alot on your flow as well.. same with metaphors an punchs, you had weak punchs, a lil harder to get you the win(dictionary line was iight but a lil playd) Ya but still weak.. Try working on all of your aspects and make it flow better, then go from there..

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first to 4 votes wins right?

3-0 is a ko

first ta five wins.
Peace.

aiight

my vote equals outofsite cause he came straight at illrhyme and focused on the battle aspect illrhyme was too generic and probabaly did look his shit up on dictionary .com. he didnt use ne direct punches or nehtign like that, he did have less corny lines though but my vote still equals outofsite...
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still uppin looks like im up 2