multi's out the ass.. that was pretty sick... for a newb.. keep working..

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I aint a newb man just had dis account like ages ago............................................... ............

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hard rating
not hat good.. you need improvments in ya strucxutre and ya flow ya multis make it iight but it aint gonna be that good.. work on it a lil bit and each freestyle ya make give it a name

overall rating 4/10

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Guess who?...

...Paramik Fuckin'...

...Owns You!

I like you.

If you ever want to be Multi Master, I'll be around ready for ya challenge.

shit you gotta work on:
NOT vocab.
incorporating multis in a better way, to suit what you're writing about.
structure

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^hmmm... after readin it again.. im kinda suspicious to whether u wrote it.. not that i doubt you or anything, but im kinda gettin deja vu, ya know?? like i seen it on another rap site somewhere..

cos u left for a while n before u left you werent that great.. now u come back n your that elevated..

correct me if im wrong though, i dont mean to spark any shit... just a feelin I got.

peace

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how do u kno me man... u got n aka???

nah i remember you from a while back..

prolly just a hunch though... dont mind me..

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o yea man i remember i battled u ages ago lol n was totally wack den, but im just takin it slow tryin ta improve gradually man. u got anyhtin u wanna vote on or for me to read???

mad hype dude 10/10...liked the structure....very nice

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