sup rb.... well this be my first drop here...


YO

from tha streets of tha ghetto im chillen here mellow//
all that shining down on me is tha suns color yellow//
wednesday afternoon with tha hood still smooth//
with not a gun shot blast killin' some ignorant fool//
or how bout them babies mommas gettin physically abused//
or them hoes on tha corner makin they livin cuz they whole life they've always been confused//
its just a waste of good flesh being misused//
but wait a minute now i forgot bout them youngtaz//
the ones who get treated like shit fo talkin to tha wrong brothaz//
or tha others gettin dropped by some cold hearted gangstaz//
now what the hell is that they said the ghetto bring loves but its more like hate//
how can we survive with out gettin checkmate//
i guess thats why some turn to drugs fo tha final escape//
the ghetto is as the ghetto lives//
what a shame it is but thats how we live
its just some thangs other people we'll neva understand why//
we just gotta keep on livin as tha days go by//
deal wit tha violence and keep ourselves on standby//
like ice cube said i know today gonna be good day!


well its just somethin from tha heart...gimme ya thoughts on it...~hollah~

aight shawty that was tight I like how you keep it real. keep comin wit it and stay wit that real shit

holla

yeah dawg u kept it madd real if you would have made it longer it would have been even better. Son when you try to write deep intelligent rhymes dawg do it high kid, trust me this always works B- and listin to gangsta life shyt like Styles P or one o them mufukas. It like, gives you madd ideas and manuvers for putting the right words in at the right time. nah mean, tha shit works fa real. u'll spit like a tru gangsta.


now that i peeped and replied to yo shyt peep and reply to mine kid. good lookin dawg. i call it slum flow. it's kinda like yours but longer. i used my method on it too ^^^ writin high method

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=17122

good lookin fam
1ne

Nice piece, I liked it, talking straight on a subject that means something to yourself.

Overall tight, stay active and keep up the good work.

Can you return the favour and peep my work,
"Single verse" & "Just 17 lines"

yo thanx fo tha luv peeps i appreciate yall checkin my lil flow...and yo 1ne flow i'll take ya advice..lol...but yo i was gonna make it longer but i had to bounce...i'll make like a part 2 to it next time..maybe we can collaborate??hollah...well thanx again yall...

uppin fo mo repliez

this was tight, steady flow.

keep uppin'
respect - TECK One kummin' at ya

thanx teck i appreciate it...

uppin'

Dont ever Write rap lyrics EVER AGAIN......





Peace......
1............

rawdeadly..shut thaa fuck up...and to my girl..good job..your doing it...jus keep practicin..dont listen to that hater..