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10-10-04, 06:33 PM
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Mona Lisa.
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Heroes Of War: Oskar Schindler
IP: 828D 0B7A
Oskar Schindler "A list has been drawn up of all those.. ..who have died.. ..and among those who have yet to survive" -Oskar Schindler He was such a great man, devoted, took risks Never in my g'fathers stories.. ..was his character ever brisk . . Alas.. ..for the sanctions past have finally met their match A man that held a soul among men trapped in iron casts Set sail with multiple masts, lives depended on his wish Cramming thousands of bodies over to the confindes of a list & for those who missed the list, certain death was forseen Met with the lips of death's kiss hoping it wouldn't have been Such a sereen scene for those that seen, optimism in view Only if you met this man then you'd eventually believe its true Against a world dividing curfue, he rotered a stand still secretly So many saved below those bastards nose, perfect & discretely Did he meet me?.. ..No, only my grandfather tells me how our saviour took a vow To diminish this callous regime in so many ways that spelt now But it took time & effort, our families couldn't really afford At least his camp was non-terminal, which stayed above board Then his reputation soared, "A camp where people stay alive?.. ..a place for Jewish sanctuary for our loved ones to survive?" The whisper spread for & wide, another hole for us to hide.. ..& decide.. ..whether we have the strength to live on, or curl up & die A Nazi General taking suicide as an option, this is more or less He'd never confess as this was in his heart the perfect & best.. ..thing to do, most Nazi's didn't have a clue, yet a feeling That would leave the german masses over-whelmed & reeling A heaven sent dealing, the lord had finally seen enough Of all the hate & killings that alligned to our lives a must & with one last thrust, he pushed the masses of Jews.. ..to a land beyond blessing where we were never refused The situation defused, a lord grazed with platinum in his fist Dented the re-write of history & then gave us Schindlers list . "Among hells fire, arose a gentle & caring soul. Maybe there is a god, who simply saw too much." -Me
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10-10-04, 07:12 PM
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Out-Spoken
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IP: AF76 A123
this was a very dope piece....the imagery was a vivid as it gets...it's like i was there...syllably count, vocabulary..were both near flawless...this was a very well thought out piece....maybe OM of the month?
there was a part or two where i felt the flow was kind of interrupted...and it was distracting... The whisper spread for & wide, another hole for us to hide.. ..& decide.. ..whether we have the strength to live on, or curl up & die A Nazi General taking suicide as an option, this is more or less He'd never confess as this was in his heart the perfect & best.. maybe it's just how I read it...but that right there is where i thought you kind of botched it up..but it doesn't take away from the luster of this piece...it's not significant enough...but what am i sayin? you already know this....anyways very very dope piece
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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10-11-04, 12:18 PM
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Mona Lisa.
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IP: 828D 0B7A
uppin you lazy fucks.
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10-11-04, 07:19 PM
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Mona Lisa.
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IP: 828D 0B7A
Stoooooooooooooop sleeping.
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10-11-04, 07:55 PM
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Whys That?
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IP: 1BF0 D10A
damn this is dope.
Your word play is near perfect. Flow was on point, Your sylable use is perfect. Visionary's are dope. There isnt anything to correct in this peice(from my point of view). All round a dope drop.. keep them coming..pz |
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10-11-04, 10:55 PM
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Mona Lisa.
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IP: 828D 0B7A
Thanks I think..
Bk up.
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