You tell me you love me
and my heart wants to believe
But in the back of my mind I cant stop thinking of how you deceived
me.
I was the one there for you thru thick and thin
and like a fool i stayed with you
even when you put your fist to my chin.

You tell me you love me
and the words sound so true
But when i saw you with another girl!
I went crazy, i didnt know what to do
When noone else would, I had ya back
I couldnt believe that you would play me like that

In my mind, i thought
what am i doin!
I gave my heart and soul to you
and now you out screwin!

You tell me you love me
Im smarter now
I can see you dont love me
that other girl is havin ya child.
But never again will be the fool
to believe it when a man says:
I Love You.

hey diz was off da chain, real meaingful an ya stayed right on point, really feelin the emotion an awww, i love you, feel better now? *wink wink*

Good:Emotion.
Bad:Inconsistency of lines and rhymes.
Decent:Vocab.
Altogether it was okay at best, but keep it up.

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rap4 ( P ) Pronunciation Key (rp)
n. Slang: A form of popular <a href="http://www.ntsearch.com/search.php?q=music&v=56">music</a> developed especially in African-American urban communities and characterized by spoken or chanted rhyming lyrics with a syncopated, repetitive rhythmic accompaniment.
^Don't forget the white man^
Poetic Scriptures poems:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157364
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=157462