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IP: F127 D910
Hey i just mastered text,audio and Topical...so why not try poetry check this out my first peice ...Poetry, Flows through the blood Of a man... ...Who doesn't understand The reason of death... ...afterlife, another Step in gods merciless plan... ...Fresh cent of life Passes through every breath... ...Express my Emotions through this Lifeless script... ...I'll love my woman until i can't bare and my heart rips... ...Even then will I put Heart into my poetry... ...You, another life form, nothing less nothing more then me... ...As Seasons change, Flowers Bloom, and then die again... ...more people lifeless, Let's unite as females and men.. ...A world without Killing and Violence, what a beautiful vision... ...The Devil and the Demon's make that a hard competition... ...Look At the Light, As My soul is being collected... ...Rising to the sky Glad god would enjoy my presence... ...Violence will continue until jesus is Ressurected... ...But we bless his birth With Joy and Christmas presents.. What do ya'll think?
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FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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IP: 01C0 04AE
pretty heartfelt...good
more imagery would be nice but not bad homie...keep up the good work 1 |
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I Smacc Booty Emcee's
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IP: F127 D910
thanx fam...i think it was pretty good for my first piece
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IP: A713 E6BC
Yeah, you need more imagery. More length would be better, too. Good emotion. You were kind of bouncing from topic to topic. More depth to the topics would be better. Pretty good.
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I agree more imagery
but do some vertical thinking...as in taking one topic and going deeper with it...your doing horizontal thinking..taking many topics and being shallow... yeah expand...brotha i liked it alot... Stay UP
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I Smacc Booty Emcee's
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IP: 1BD5 13B2
thanx mayn..............
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