All you mother fucking broods immense and small adore me
Dumb ass hoe’s bugging out because the can’t score me
Haha shit I’m down by means of with you hoe’s if ya’ll horny
Fuck with this hard core nigga than you be on floorboards real fast
Put my foot on you back and get my gat and you know BLAST
If that aint bloodcurdling enough then take a breathe which will be your last
Mother fucker try and trounce me you’ll need a real lucky miracle
I’m a true ridahGangsta Murderer, Killa come from the baddest circle
Every mother fucking day I see in the parallel I see a soldier
Not one that’s soft as pussie but one that uses a big ass revolver
Fuck transgression solver I’ll be here fucking with this rap shit
See a big ass with titties hell yeah bitch I’ll fo sho smack it

tell me how that was.

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It was alright...to a certain degree. It was real, but I'd givea 6/10

c'mon lets seee a quick free style. shit. upping.

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upping damn. i'll view your battles and mics.

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not that good to forced...about a 3/10 if you ust made a normal thing it would be better ive seen yer work over 5's about 7/10s dont freestyle like that its gay

it was an aiite peice...I didnt see much consistantsy in the topic..
Like the others stated, it seemed forced...Try adapting your style into an original concept by listening and writing like certain artists, then incorperate their style into yours, in turn creating a seemingly new style all your own. After that, try and incorperate a higher vocabulary into your verses and everyday speech. (YES, IT HELP)

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think u coulda done much better.tek said it best tho'.4/10.stay up.

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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE

i liked it so idk it was kinda hot so i say 8/10

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cool cool upping shit and i love my verses hard to figure out.

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upping god dammit.

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i'de say it was aiight u need to work on da vocab
though but i'de give u a 5/10 return da fav. will ya?

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what all i used was good vocab man that all made sense. shit gimme some real feed back on this shit.

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It need's Work, Otherwise it'd be aight Way forced lines man, Sometimes there is a time to freestyle, that time is one and 5000, this wasnt your time. No hate.

-Wreck-

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hmmm alright upping.

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