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Old 11-12-04, 12:12 PM   #1
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testin' my flow...feedbak wanted.
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i drop't this in V.T.'s elevation room so i figured ,shit why not get some feeds from everybody on my flow.just a freestyle to test my flow.how'd i do?

i leave ribs broken,1 pokes holes in da lung,now this kids chokin'
breathin' stops,death wit' eye lids open,gangsta' huh?guess u died
str8 locin',
i ain't loafin',smoke blunts wit' str8 coke in,coke blunts jus' way potent,
pop gats at hate spoken,leave holes in,like old tokens,slam bodies like hulk hogan,
got janes hoin' and joes foldin',fire melts moldin's,ya' soul's in',
crush spirits ya' soul's holdin',knock u down like bowlin',
flows hot n scoldin',to obtain spits golden Grandz was chosen,
unweavin' webs woven,never sleep no eyes closin',V.T. niccas rides rollin' leave broads wit the thighs swollen,hit grand slams on web cams like ryan,nolan,
gun butt ya dumb fuks leavin ya lump'd up,ur flows go in a dump truck,
whack'd somewhat is ur skillz sum'd up,numb nutts,still alive u got dumb luck,
my rhymes like dirty sex when bumbs fuk,don' get stuck cause my guns' tucked
make u see da light n not the spot that the sun struck.
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Old 11-12-04, 02:50 PM   #2
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shit was fire...
ya flow was HOT...
creativeness was good...
i felt the whole verse ran smoth....
9.0 outta 10...

V.T mother fuckers
WHATS YA THOUGHT WAS GONNA HAPPEN???

BANG-BANG-EARLY....
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Old 11-12-04, 02:59 PM   #3
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Flow was good, the structure seemed off, but reading it,i picked up where you wanted pauses and breaks, nice job..8/10..1
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Old 11-12-04, 03:11 PM   #4
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thank you for the feed peeps.the stucture i fixed how i wanted it then i posted and it went bak to that so i left it.uupppppppppppppppppnnnnnnnnnnnnn..............
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Old 11-12-04, 04:34 PM   #5
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pretty good drop...the content was there to..
id say bout 8/10......
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speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!
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Old 11-12-04, 04:38 PM   #6
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thx daz.appreciate the feed.
uppn this
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ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
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Old 11-12-04, 05:00 PM   #7
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whoah, really good verse that, your multis and wordplay were good. 9/10 id say
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Old 11-12-04, 05:44 PM   #8
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damn..thx.i appreciate the feed goldeneye.
uppn for feed..................................
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Old 11-15-04, 02:22 PM   #9
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Uppn.............................
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ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE
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Old 11-15-04, 02:36 PM   #10
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yo loveliss where u stay in BK...
i no a girl that live out there...
she stay on montauk ave....
o yea nice flow kidd
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Old 11-15-04, 02:40 PM   #11
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good shit overall, no need to say wat i think da otha peeps took da words outta my mouth..but luvin ur shit....ur elevating more n more each day..keep it up...9/10
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Old 11-15-04, 04:05 PM   #12
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Thx For The Feed Ppl.lil C Wats Good Hommie.saw Ur Pics.
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Uppn..........................................
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ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
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Old 11-15-04, 04:48 PM   #13
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damn right this was good!
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Old 11-15-04, 04:58 PM   #14
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nice wordplays and multi'z nice flow u got der


u messed up some parts but either way dis an good piece

8/10........word
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Old 11-15-04, 05:05 PM   #15
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thx for the feed d.
uppn...................................
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ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE
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