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11-16-04, 04:57 PM
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Whats Wrong With Our Communties?
IP: CA57 7860
Whats Wrong With Our Communties? What Hurts Internally Doesnt Show On The Outside, Whats Happenin In The Lives Of These Young Girls n Guys, Dont You Hear The Cries?Of All Of These Young Children, Innocent Civilians Gettin Killed Then Turnin Into Dead Victims, But Who Dares To Listen, Everyone Is More Interested In The War n Politics, Drugs,Cars,Money, Jewelry Clothes N Shit, Angers Sparked, So You Must Be Careful To Play Your Part, Show Heart, Able To Get Arrested For Makin A Silly Remark, Youth Is Dyin,Noones Round To Protect,Not Even The Fam, Mothers With Crack Addictions, N The Hubs Aint Around To Give A Damn, Kids Are Joining Gangs,Can Someone Tell Me Why Is This, Gang Violence,Until A Child Is Left In Utter Silence, Fathers Attackin Mothers,Then Mothers Attackin Kids,To Much Abusin, Kids Stay Up, The Best Thing To Do Is To Wait For A Proper A Solution, Just Some Things That Was On My Mind Feedback
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11-16-04, 05:18 PM
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IP: 256E B563
i feels you holmes.....you can't really rate some shit that was on yo mind...cuz, you just put it out there without making corrections to appeal....but, i felt this and all...i see a lot of what you said going on round where I'm from....it was real yo, i always respect tha realness....keep droppin it fam.....good job, yo
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11-16-04, 05:30 PM
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IP: CA57 7860
Thanks Phrost.....more feedback people
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11-16-04, 08:43 PM
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IP: CA57 7860
Feedback..................
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11-16-04, 09:39 PM
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IP: 01C3 560C
yea man i agree with phrost. but i think u need some elevation. work harder to put more feeling into ya verses. try using different vocab that you wouldnt normally think of. keep up the good work.
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11-16-04, 10:20 PM
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IP: C11A B834
tight idea....cant fuck with your thoughts......but you can manipulate them into something a lil smoother.......some of it rhymed which is a plus, prolly better if i could hear it in audio cuz lyrcism matters when you are rymin werds that dont rhyme........ dope drop, apparently you think about things other than pullin straps and gats....i can def. appreciate that.........peace
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11-17-04, 06:43 PM
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IP: 7BDA BBAF
Thanks for the feedback...i aint really used to these type of drops....i never done one like this before...but im tryin......Feedback
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