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A Heart Split In Two Ft. "fi-del"
IP: 408D D2A2
streetryda: girl you got my mind shrouded and clouded with your beautiful face... embrace my feelings, im astounded that u invited me inside ya place... fazed by ur grace and amazed by the chalantness that your flauntin... wantin ya to remain taunting my testosterone, giving me jauntiness... distrought wits is the feeling im left with when you've been around... pounded the wall when i found out i couldnt come cuz im grounded... rerouted the path and laugh at all the mistakes i made in the past... at last i think i found someone to be mine, hope dont go too fast... drafted and crafted you into my life that is filled with complexity... expectedly directed u to be the only one thats to be next to me... sexually active and left me distracted and pheenin and scheemin... believin ya when you said i was the best and that you werent leavin... treating ya to the rest of the world cuz ya keep leavin me swirled... twirled ya around the dance floor and ill buy diamonds and pearls... girl you dont understand the heart of this man i hope we're forever... severd my arteriers and cut out my heart when i got more clever.... rememberd that guy you called but i didnt think anything about him... shoutin at you cuz im hating myself for the emotions now doubted... mounted my heart on the shelf so everyone would see my feelings... kneeling and praying that my sins, could i repent all of my dealings... stealing my heart was something that is thought to become love... tugged at my emotions, only person to turn to is the lord above... erase my steps, no trace is left to where we only came direct... correct my wrongs and i despise your eyes is what u should expect... infect ya mind and stress this knife comin by the end of the night... rewrite my rhymes to express my mind about how ima end ya life... scrpits cant contain what remains to be said about this stupid bitch... yo tell em "fi-del" "fi-del": fuck this bitch she too quick to switch then ditch she's like my nervous twitch..never leaving me alone Think's she royalty..like she needing a throne. if I was about to die..id rather be bleeding,gone.. .than seeing her face right before my death. she kisse's me ..then sez she adore's my breath. damn this bitch bore's me as if we have nothing left she ignore's me then left me out in the cold. im doubting she know's the meaning of love. im talking to god.. but it's like she's screaming above. im feinding to shove..this bitch of bridge... or better yet..bury her in a ditch on the ridge. i may kill her then freeze this bitch in a fridge.. im unsure how much longer this torment will last she's turned out to be a permanent task... ......... but then i spark an idea............ maybe if i showed her i care.. like holding her near. i know that she fear's sentimentle healing's. ..but if I give her love it might repent all feeling's.. I whisper into her ear.. how long will it last? she turned and started into my eye's ..looking so vast... i could tell her mind was racing thinking so fast.. .i told her ..this isnt a joke..this vision proke's.. i want to make her more positive with more self esteem.. i told her..."i love you,I wanna build myself a team", her eye's start to gleam...she say's what do you mean? i start explaining how she brought out the man in me.. ...let's create our own family..
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*~Emericas Finest~*
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IP: 0825 899A
10/10... don't know what to say... Beyond sick open mic... If you bitches don't check this one out ima kill your bitch ass... Both verses fire
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Puttin MD On The Map
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IP: 408D D2A2
uppin thanks for the feed fam.......lets get more comin......
peace~1
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*It's About Time RapVerse Got A New Generation Of ReInforcements***Aiming On My Next Target*
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IP: 93C0 D1DD
Both Verses Was Fire Fam,I'm Talking Decent Vocab Structure And All10/10
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Hell yeah
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IP: FD58 E3D6
yah pretty amazing man too...perfect scoor too
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***cITYSLICka***
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IP: C729 E597
10/10..................beggining To End Was Gr8. Keep Em Comin'
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![]() ![]() I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY, ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there) EVIL............backwards =............LIVE |
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IP: 5285 DC82
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Puttin MD On The Map
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IP: 408D D2A2
uppin this peeps thanks for all this feed lets get more comein.....
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Flyweight
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IP: 3AE8 B82C
Ey Dawg I Give U A 10/10 On Dat Shit...erthing U Did Was
Goog On Dis One..it Was Hott..holla
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STL SOLDIA...KEEP REPPIN
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hullabaloser
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IP: 07E0 A9F2
This collab was nice, wouldnt give it a 10.
streetryda: First I seen from you, pretty dope, well structured and lyrically was nice, not too cmoplex, pretty plain and simple. "fi-del": Fam, I seen bettter from you man, dunno what you did here, but you didnt seem on form, Also, I think it looks better when you spell it correctly, you know, and set out the structure, Lyrically this was nice, flow was good, Cos I read em like I imagine it in audio lol, yeh you had good flow, stuck on topic and follow'd it all through, for that it's dope, but the grammar and shit let's it down. Keep it up Fam, I know you can do dope, 1.
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Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
thnx for the feed fam..
Your correct I proberly should of taken more time on this.That way I coulda perfected it. But somtime's your on point somtime's your tired.. up |
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 9D21 DBB5
StreetRyda this was nice, good flo and structure, fi-del was this was pretty good also, It sounded like lyrics to a song, I liked the idea of it, keep practicing you'll be dropping ten outa tens..... but for now..... 7.5/10
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Whys That?
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IP: 5285 DC82
yo thnx for the "real" feed on this.
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Puttin MD On The Map
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IP: 408D D2A2
yeh man tru on what fi-del said.....upin thanks for all the feed and lets see some more...and distilled you will see more from me soon enough
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IP: 28AD 5545
I'll give it an 8/10 good job fi del @ reppin the council
streetryder you killed this cuz good job on both
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