heres a piece i wrote a while ago..like i said i aint too good at dis whole poetry thing..peep it..



Hands of visible asperity
Telling a forgotten tale.
Hands that cherish and also bless.

Hands with a deep soul quality
Performing ephemeral acts,
Leaving eternal gloved imprints,
Which linger upon the source
Like a broken melody.
Each hand with its repertoire of acts,
Released in spontaneous harmony
With human sympathy.

Mortal hands with mortal flesh,
Audacious now and charitable then.
Amphibious creatures
Ranging between night and day.
Slaves in their night
And masters in their light.

VERY GOOD...girl,you got the touching vocab, and the skills to make this a unique piece,it had a flow to it,even tho some lines didnt rhyme,i still could picture this and i think it would make a great spoken word drop on audio, dope drop,keep em comin..pc

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Hands with a deep soul quality
Performing ephemeral acts,
Leaving eternal gloved imprints,
Which linger upon the source
Like a broken melody.
Each hand with its repertoire of acts,
Released in spontaneous harmony
With human sympathy.

^^^^^
Lil C,
Sometimes when we write we don't realize that our words can make a major difference in another persons life.That little piece of ur drop up there just lit up my
mind.You may have no clue what I mean but just know that ur use of words can heal a broken soul.aight i'll call you later.
p.s.-read it backwards from bottom to top and see if you can figure out what the hell i'm talkin' about.Luv ya C.lata.

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I'm like CHUCKy dyin' to live in the flesh free of the BATTERY,
ASSAULT n ROBBERY rapidly,wishin' cupid would clap at me
N lift this evil spell so I can experience happilly evil backwards-see(down there)
EVIL............backwards =............LIVE