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01-24-05, 02:54 AM
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Mystery of death..
IP: 2E24 A1AD
When our curtain is up.. Were living our life.. But when our curtain is down.. We get relieved of that right.. So where do we go? A place? A time? Humans cant comprehend death.. Theres no exact end we can find.. Possibly were in darkness.. Possibly we can see.. Possibly we can interact.. Possibly were left be.. Would the mind go insane? Only our own thoughts to hear.. Will we even know were gone? Or is it a dream well be in? I'm thinking.. As time goes by.. We mature with age.. Comming to terms with death.. Its like turning a page.. What was once a great light.. Gets replaced with another.. The first is forgotton.. And tossed in the gutter.. Is hell really a place? Or a way of falling from grace? Trapped alone with an insane mind.. What a way to go to waste.. And heaven, is not forgotton.. Helping god with a cause.. Become an angel with no flaws.. Thats my ambition.. Whats yours? |
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01-24-05, 03:21 AM
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IP: E4F0 8C0B
Pretty good, flow was cool, I don't like how the lines skipped lines because your lines were cut so short, topic was good, approached nicely. Could have gone a bit deeper obviously, but it was pretty good to me
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01-25-05, 08:10 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 0825 899A
this is a great piece, your thoughts on this, your flow,words, everything, i often wonder about these things myself, we all do, but what a great way to put it, nice piece..1
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