Track I made for my girl...soundclick link in sig...

Links:
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=167091
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=172849

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Soundclick
NEW Myspace

this was pretty good i was feeling it........lol at your gurls name is the same as my ex's hahah..a but anyway yea the beat was nice and the flow and emotion you gave it was great i bet your gurls gonna lvoe this...damn...pretty good....remind me of myself alot...

join The Establishment...word

great track tho

Fuck...this has been slept on...uppin' for some feed...

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Soundclick
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flow is pretty good...
song means a lot, which is cool
vocab could be better
good beat
good hook...i like it
make your songs a little more complexe rhyming schemes...
this was good though, could be better...you have more in you, you are improving a lot, and pretty fast...your flow was a lot better in the 2nd verse also...
you are almost overdoing your rhyming word sometimes, just keep the flow, and throw a double on top of it...
this was good though...nice hook

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vocabis kinda weak.....and the way you sound is not that great...i hate how your flow is perfect..your exact..uasully that is good but its not that wonderfull with you....

i feel your emotion...i just hate that perfectness......im feeling this shit,,,could use more emotion...although this has lots of emotion in it your voice lacks emotion.....
lyrics are good...
1st..nice shit but vocab could be alot better....other than that..nice shit...

chorus.. nice chorus...
kinda catchy...

2nd... that verse was better thanthe 1st verse...nice shit..not great but good...
im feeling these lyrics because this is how i feel about my girl

3rd...this verse has bad quality..need to just try to spit all of your verses at the same time...other than that nice shit,,..


well this is a good song...i bet you got ad pussy after this..lolj/k

but yeah do you wanna collab with another type of song liek this....becuase i feel the same way about my girl the way you feel abotu your girl...

so do you wanna collab...
if so choose the beat but make sure it is better than this one

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my MYSPACE is Better than Yours

I thought it was well written. Your flow sometimes felt like you were reading than actually feeling it. The beat is nice.... maybe you can try a differrent snare sound and see if it sounds better than the clap. I like the strings, the bass can be a little louder. All you need is a good sound card to get a better recording of your vocals. You got talent. You should invest on better equipment. What mic are you using?