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Old 02-22-05, 11:57 PM   #1
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It's time...

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The earth shifts, an inclusive metamorphosis of life
A man sees various bodies waft by, sits down, and cries
What happened to God’s beloved land, a downfall commences
Not enough time for proper burials, bodies brimful in ditches
A modern day apocalypse, the immense torrent all over
Boats shattered, from fragmentary hurricanes, an eccentric disaster
Tornadoes and twisters ravage the land captivating those unclean
Was it how the prophets envisaged, our world has bowed bitter, and mean.
People run, screaming for their life and loved ones, as they did not see
The most terrible possible scenerio, coming out at them, off screen
Was the Media to blame, did they destroy our once clean, kind world..
Who took all this information, this bullshit that the media hurled…
Why would God turn his back on this most prosperous earth…
After all it was him, the creator of all, who gave us the thirst..
The thirst for power, our thought provoking manners in which we deal
Countless virtues, but most of all, he gave us our heart, in which we feel.
Our thoughtless actions based upon our conscious, but now you see
I am writing this, from the depths of my basement, can you be…
The one who sets gods almighty wrath upon us to make us pay
For the dilemmas we’ve caused, and our progressed delayed
How can you say you are not, blame it on some one else is what you’ll do
But can’t you fucking see, we are all in one, so if one fucks up, the rest are fools…
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Old 02-23-05, 09:01 AM   #3
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How can you say you are not, blame it on some one else is what you’ll do
But can’t you fucking see, we are all in one, so if one fucks up, the rest are fools…
^so much truth in those last lines

Definately feeling the concept and I like how you included the religious aspect, questioning how it could've gotten so far...Vocabulary was perfect, had your flow on lock and the structure made it easy to read. The emotion was good, like how you showed us different ideas and opinions on the matter. Used enough details to get more indepth on the subject...

Tight drop as usual!

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Old 02-23-05, 09:50 AM   #4
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i like this 1 u felt the same way so i know where u coming from wit that & those last 2 lines like drama queen i agree wit that also keep up the good work
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Old 02-23-05, 11:16 AM   #5
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Nice drop Given, it was right on point, meaningful an the message you tried sending out i think was achieved, ya whole rhyme scheme on the peice was decent as hell dogg

Keep droppin this fire an reppin the famlay man, 8/10
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Old 02-23-05, 04:22 PM   #6
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Yay for feedback,leave links even if you are in my crew, I will hit them back. I appreciate the feedback.
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Old 02-24-05, 03:02 PM   #7
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Old 02-24-05, 03:15 PM   #8
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this was alright
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