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i replyed to your thread here:
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Magical has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-27-05 03:39 AM.

Speats has ACCEPTED this battle on 02-27-05 02:11 PM.

This is only the first line,dont get to nervous
I could image your ass jumping around in a circus
Your getting annoying,and im only being honest
Parallel should shut is mouth,let me ask the dentist*
He could brake some teeth and put new vocabulary in it
Then go buy new and serious shit at the clinic
Ill traught lyrics deeper than michael jackson's nose
Youll finish ugly enought to open your own"Magical Show"
Poeple d'be ready to pay alot of money to see your ass in there
Then after,Buy a mic and stop complaining dat its a parent affaire*

*his alias
*always talkin dat hes gonna get a mic

nice verse, lets get some votes now
uppin........

Voted For: Speats

Magical

Why u jumpin off to temptation, ur way to judgemental
Ur so played out u remind me of a wack Instrumental
judgemental and instrumental dont rhyme.. rhyming = same number of syllables.. but anyway.. even if this did rhyme.. that was played out.. 2/10
Ur so dumb, u put cigarette buds in urself, ur so retarded
U touch little boys?, like a Queer, don’t even get started
retarded and started dont rhyme.. refer to last bar explanation about why.. other then that.. it looks to me like in 2 lines you just pulled out 2 fake personals.. and not even making it into a punch.. NICE!.. 1/10
I’m Napolean Dynamite when it comes to Explodin u
yea I got a 12 gage thats why im the gun, controlling u
Wow @ the gayness of the first line.. that meta sucked.. the second line doesnt have a punch.. and doesnt mean shit in terms of a battle.. 2/10
Yo bitch let me borrow a Light, ill burn ya just to Shine
Ur played like a fatties boobies, sick, “she jiglin like a lime�
What the hell does 'jiggling like a lime' have to do with dissing him?.. is that supposed to add something mad creative to your verse or something?.. no punch.. just garbage.. 2/10
I can imagine u Vomiting over a fat women with Bulimic
Ur like a baby Wining, off that Liquor like an annoying mimic
Your metaphors are terrible.. there was no punch in this line again.. nothing was related to dissing him again.. 2/10

Overall - 9/50

Speats

This is only the first line,dont get to nervous
I could image your ass jumping around in a circus
With some wording and a set up this could have been a decent line.. but right now its missing the punch.. 4/10
Your getting annoying,and im only being honest
Parallel should shut is mouth,let me ask the dentist
honest and dentist dont rhyme.. once again.. you could have had a decent concept, but you worded it wrong.. 3/10
He could brake some teeth and put new vocabulary in it
Then go buy new and serious shit at the clinic
This doesnt relate to battling at all.. no punch either.. 2/10
Ill traught lyrics deeper than michael jackson's nose
Youll finish ugly enought to open your own"Magical Show"
Decent metaphor in the first line.. pretty good attempt at flipping his name in the second.. work on wording your punches, though.. 5/10
Poeple d'be ready to pay alot of money to see your ass in there
Then after,Buy a mic and stop complaining dat its a parent affaire
Generally speaking after you make a punchline you leave it at that.. dont follow up on your punch in the next set up.. decent attempt at a personal in the second line.. 4/10

Overall - 18/50

VOTE - SPEATS

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Voted For: Magical

Speats...

This is only the first line,dont get to nervous
I could image your ass jumping around in a circus
This was weak man...4/10

Your getting annoying,and im only being honest
Parallel should shut is mouth,let me ask the dentist*
Doesn't even rhyme, weak punch man...2/10

He could brake some teeth and put new vocabulary in it
Then go buy new and serious shit at the clinic
...wack....4/10

Ill traught lyrics deeper than michael jackson's nose
Youll finish ugly enought to open your own"Magical Show"
your best bar...eh....6/10

Poeple d'be ready to pay alot of money to see your ass in there
Then after,Buy a mic and stop complaining dat its a parent affaire*
...way off the flow...and weak...3/10

overall: 19/50


magical...

Why u jumpin off to temptation, ur way to judgemental
Ur so played out u remind me of a wack Instrumental
....no...was bad punch...4/10

Ur so dumb, u put cigarette buds in urself, ur so retarded
U touch little boys?, like a Queer, don’t even get started
...stupid punch man...all played concepts...4/10

I’m Napolean Dynamite when it comes to Explodin u
yea I got a 12 gage thats why im the gun, controlling u(1)
man...this was wack.....3/10

Yo bitch let me borrow a Light, ill burn ya just to Shine
Ur played like a fatties boobies, sick, “she jiglin like a lime�(2)
...eh, one of your best lines this battle...5/10

I can imagine u Vomiting over a fat women with Bulimic(3)
Ur like a baby Wining, off that Liquor like an annoying mimic
....don't really get it...eh...4/10

overall: 20/50

This battle was wack...both of you elevate now!

v/magical

iight uppinn...........................................

Voted For: Magical

nice battle. you took it better rhym'n ur opener killed his ...closer to nice drop lot of original shit in your spit. .

opener//jaa
closer//jaa
metas//jaa
personals//jaa
appeal//jaa
wordplay//jaa
vocab//jaa

over all i thought this was a sweep . jaay you took this one super easy

speats.. nice drop it jus wasnt enough to beat jay's

return the honest vote

Vote//Ill Jaay

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