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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

Wicked Ones Verse

Only real thing you have is hair, and even that is fallin off...
You're lyrics are one point only when you're suckin off...
^ Punch aight could be worded better though

Don't take me lightly like an overdose, leave you with a broken nose...
U spit with bittin' rhymes and stolen flows and I steal ya shows...
^ Rhyming nice however the "diss" went off a bit near the end

I'm platinum rippin' golden foes you can't match my skill or wit...
^ No connection whatsoever

I'll rip your shit, you're just a bitch, you're whole shit sounds the same...
& I've been writtin' lyrics before you made that account name...
^ no punch really insults could be much better

Internet Mc i'll damage your brain until your heads empty...
^ again no connection with verse rhyme scheme

Why such a short rhyme didn't have enough bittin' lines...
That's a hip-hop crime i'll reach the top and shine...
^ filler i mean unless i missed something you need proof of biting

My flow is a demon, pure evil and you're rhymes are petty stealin...
When I'm creepin' and everybody sleepin' I take a peep in...
^ kinda self-g there not really effective as a punch

Put a pillow over your face to stop the screamin' put the mic to your temple...
& let the whole world know this wasn't a battle I was just makin' an example...
^ Nice closer there best bar perhaps

MaRVJay1009's Verse

u wrong sayin u da sickest son,i know how da use a clip & gun
if he keep talkin shit ima put "TWO" in dis nigga "wicked-ONE"..
^ Gangsta rap is meh but good wordplay though

cant fukk jay dis brotha 2 sick,u gay dont say u luv a new chick
u like a "prostitute in iraq" in how u b "suckin TR.OO.P's dick"...
^ lol wordplay again punch started meh but finished good

fukk sm ya just a weak crew..i heard they dont even need u
i could tell by ya record ur favorite letta's on da alphabet r D.Q
^ good punch liked this lol metaphor used good

every battle my flows change,u cant do dat? ur so lame.....
and da funny thing is u neva had a song on ya OLD NaME....
^ Personal but wasn't as strong as previous bars

MiXTaPE....nobody think ya shits great so now u upset....
ur not "SUPERiOR" i just thinkin u b usin 2 much "METH".....lol
^ good flow steady diss good bar

u sad..eitehr doin open mic or battlin regardless ya suck.........



no wonder y u retarded as fukk
Dope closer i personally like quotes i don't see how they are played if used correctly they are effective...and this was good nice personal too

Overall
WickedOne i was dissapointed...ya verse was good in a rhyming sense and flow/structure but it lacked the neccessity of a battle verse you sacrificed punches for rhyming and you need to learn how to balance the 2.

Marv i liked this verse some effective punches a couple of personals a few bits of wordplay thrown in there...all in all...easy win i'd say.

V/MarvJay1009...RTF on my sig within 3 days or i remove this vote (Gotta make sure RTF's stand)

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

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I'm platinum rippin' golden foes you can't match my skill or wit...
^^^W1 why was this in your battle? it was just a random line that didn't go with anything

Only real thing you have is hair, and even that is fallin off...
this is your only line that i could of liked if it was worded good, the rest didn't have any wordplay that was dissin on this cat.

marv.-
u wrong sayin u da sickest son,i know how da use a clip & gun
if he keep talkin shit ima put "TWO" in dis nigga "wicked-ONE"..
cant fukk jay dis brotha 2 sick,u gay dont say u luv a new chick
u like a "prostitute in iraq" in how u b "suckin TR.OO.P's dick"...
fukk sm ya just a weak crew..i heard they dont even need u
i could tell by ya record ur favorite letta's on da alphabet r D.Q
every battle my flows change,u cant do dat? ur so lame.....
^^^ all good witty disses with wordplay. decent battle from you. other cats verse doesn't really coundt as a battle.

anyway get an honest vote ... link on top... leave honest feed too

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Voted For: MaRVJay1009

vote: marv

no doubt, no question, do i have to explain.

for one marv had actual personals, wicked didnt. marv had decent punches, wicked didnt, marvs flow was aight, wickeds wasnt. marv came with at least some sense of chariciture, wicked came trashy. marv had a decent closure, i gave wicked's closure a smirk only b/c i was extatic his verse was over. it was really that bad.

vote: marv.
pc.

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quote your own damn lyrics...

okay goodlookin uppin 4 more votes

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"Wordz Ahgod has DECLINED this battle on 12-20-06 09:49 PM.

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^^he's scared.lol

can we get dis shit closed already man

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"Wordz Ahgod has DECLINED this battle on 12-20-06 09:49 PM.

This thread has been automatically closed."

^^he's scared.lol