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03-08-05, 07:20 PM
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a sample of my song called I cant be stop
IP: 41F3 0D0A
Can't be stop I wont be stop//
untill I reach to the top// I can go in any hood cause I aint no flip flop// my least favorite hobie is running from the cops// but you can find me at tha ammunition shop// it sounds like two country's is battling// because of tha way my trunk is really rattling// im short but I keep it gangsta you can tell by tha way my pants is sagging// but im still a kid so I keep on laser tagging// my jewelry keeps on shining but I dont mean to be bragging// hate people on keeping talking but I speacially hate them girls that keep on nagging// everytime I speak my words keep flowing// im still on top even though I aint growning// thug life is tha only thing im knowing// and greatness is tha only thing im showing// |
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03-08-05, 09:09 PM
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www.militantmusic.com
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IP: CBD1 4982
ight first of ya flow and structre are horrible rhymes were'nt that good either up ur vocab ur lines are way to strecthed make em like
***************** ******************** **************** ******************** something like that....read around other peoples open mics and u'll get what im sayin better...do some wordplay ask around for some more advice orya can hit me up in a private messeage and ill help ya out some moreor u cna go to the emergency help center and look aroud there and that'll help u good luck man...return the feedback in one of my open mics in my signutare....peace
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