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04-01-05, 10:02 PM
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FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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Intelligence
IP: 28BD 9D87
If I was Stephen Hawkins would y'all keep hawkin'?
Or Einstein inclined to seek problem, wud y'all keep talkin' Brain waves make way for strange craves, synapses been absent Then they askin' all sorts of wack shit, is Tha kid packin' Nah...my mind is the artillery I go hard wit, memory And experience the shells I squeeze off wit, no symmetry One hemisphere seems off a bit, the energy beam's propensity Burrows into my mind's density..forcing reason to rise Resistin' treason, I cease to find any reason to lie I am the prototype of thought, caught up in this whirl- Wind of world sin..where logic says hide like pearl Confined to clam shells, new ideas damned and sterile When is the metaphorical box gonna stretch, it's narrow Like most small minds, sparrow-like in their own world Where bliss is the kiss of fate, dead-dates to tabulate And the head-strong coagulate, jus like a batch of apes Wretched in primeval tendency, primal window entrance Naturally selected to diminish, brittle minds are a hindrance |
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04-03-05, 09:16 AM
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FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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IP: 28BD 9D87
eeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee er
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04-03-05, 09:57 AM
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I Thought You Left?
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IP: DFC2 4C11
Overall:
Very good piece. It flowed nice. I felt the whole vibe of it. The topic was cool and you went in-depth about it, so that helped. Vocabulary was awesome and helped the imagery. Flow: The flow was pearl. Definantly was a big plus for this piece. You stayed on piont and didnt fall off with it. Syllables went well together. Good job. Imagery: Imagery was very good in this piece. I felt the struggle that you were expressing. Vocabulary really brought out the imagery in your piece. So great job on the imagery. Rhyme Scheme: Another big focus of this piece I liked. The rhyming and multi's really flowed well together which is tough to do. You made it all make sense with your multi's instead of just forcing them. Awesome rhyming in this piece. Great piece. Felt it all the way through. Hit up the link in my sig. Thanks, peace.
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04-03-05, 10:17 AM
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Loyalty proven
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IP: C7EE 5FCD
dope shit man. this piece was nice as hell. your words was like poetry man. after readin you and VP's shit, i feel like this site may be alright after all. this reminds me of some old Atticus shit. i mean it felt like everyword had a meaning. Great piece fam. this shit was real good. keep up the good work.
PS get another win, i dont like bein ya only text win. lmao. good job fam
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04-05-05, 06:32 AM
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FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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IP: 1ADC A69C
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^^Word...I appreciate the feedback But, I actually have 37 text wins and 7 losses...My other name, N-SIGHT, was banned ans STROBE refuses to merge the accounts. 1 |
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04-05-05, 01:41 PM
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www.militantmusic.com
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IP: CBD1 4982
damn this was dope....nice structre flow was almost flawless...vocab was reall good...wordplay was nice...metas were good...ya really doin ya thing im feelin ya shit dawg keep up the good work im lookin out for another open mic from u good job...
8.5/10 please return the favor in me and speats open mic link in my sig...thanks
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04-05-05, 07:56 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3CAE 6243
siiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiick... ya sick fucking piece, pretty good use of vocab, like this shit a lot, flow was nice, meta's were sick as shit, stayed solid, didn't fall off on any line, thats a big plus, overall everything just went together really well, was a good topic to write on also, great piece really, 9/10 = my highest om rating yet, return the favor
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04-06-05, 12:14 AM
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Out-Spoken
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IP: AF76 A123
this was dope man...finally a piece that has some kind of depth to it...i loved the imagery on this...and your comparisons that you stitched in there...also..your syllable count, as well as flow and everything that goes with..was really nice..you said what exactly what you wanted to say..without sacraficing anything for it...this was real good...
if you have time..return the feedback...on either..."leavin me" or "before eden" or both if you'd like...thanks 2 fingers 1 love
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Seek & Destroy We have fun in my basement Time is not long, and indecision is hells cemment. So the well is rented, untill heaven is relevant. Untill then, to be eloquent, sex cells, so le'ts cellibate. "watch what you watchin...fox keeps feedin' us toxin's..stop sleepin' start thinkin outside of the box and unplug from the matrix doctrine....but watch what you say cause big brother is watchin" - nas - sly fox The I.H.C.J.S.F.M.T.R.H.P.M.M.W.T.S.M.S.I.T.F.F.W.A.S. O Crew
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04-08-05, 05:34 AM
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FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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IP: 1ADC A69C
appreciate the feed
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04-08-05, 06:06 PM
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leave you rest'n pz's
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IP: A14B AE90
NICE JOB q, IM SURPRISED THIS GOT SLEPT ON...IDE NOMINATE IT FOR OM OF THE MONTH BUT ITS A LIL SHORT.....damn ya really had me interested in this verse..crazy vocab, much respect there homie....there was 1 line i wasnt feeling(apes lines) but it still flowed and what not,..i guess it just didnt click with me...like i didnt get the relevency of it to that bar..but w/e...this was a very good drop....ill keep a look out for more from ya .....stay up...pz RTF.please.....
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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts what the fuck, was you high..? did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...! . . fake fucks..move on...! |
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04-09-05, 05:20 PM
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FiVe SoUrCe CeO
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IP: 1ADC A69C
Why can't a short(er) piece be nominated?
appreciate the feed 1 |
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04-10-05, 04:45 PM
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Banned: Cheating
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IP: 3CAE 6243
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