more feed on this dope shit yo don't sleep

Or cursed men, condemned by God, to punish their sins, or greed of wealth?
^^wasnt feeling the last part of this line but thats bout it.....^^shouldnt be...OR greed n wealth..<get me...it sounded odd............(read odd)
.i laughed my ass off on that.."close my eyes n hum a tune"
in the middle of war..it just cracked me up bro, only cuz you had
great imagery then i imagined you in the middle of it all with closed eyes....LMFAO..ROFL..ohh that was good..this was one of your better om's
a lil long but koo..........

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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
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fake fucks..move on...!

Damn yo... you seriously surprised me.. this was an amazing piece.. forget about structure or perfect flow.. shyt.. your imagery was more then dope man.. it was f'n amazing.. i could picture myself in that battle.. how i look around all my comrades are dead and im the only one standing up.. shyt.. this was a long piece.. and wen i first saw the whole verse i was like.. damn i gotta read this whole shyt?? hell no.. but then immidately after the first 6 bars.. i was like wow.. this shyt is good and then i continued on reading it.. I seriously can't wait for the second version.. yo u gotta promise me that you'll pm me wen this shyt comes out iight? damn oh yeah lol imma rate it.. umm

Vocab: 6/10
Structure: 2/10
Emotion: 7/10
Flow: 5/10
Imagery: 40/10..

60/50

A+ yo.. thats how much u surprsied me..

oh yeah.. and thanx for taking part of my old name *ingenius Mind* cough lol.. nice job man.. pc

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Rofl... ya i'll pm you the second version... rofl at taking part of your old name, ya i'm holding it down for you bro

Wow, all dope heads calling my om's dope, I better get one into the hall of fame, or win best open mic of the month for one of em'

holy FUCK headgames, why didn't you tell me about this earlier.....you may have had shitty structure (well not that bad), but your IMAGERY IMAGERY was fucking amazing, wow, its like i was fucking fighting that war.....holy shit, this seriously, was such an emotional/imaginative piece, unbelievable how you incorporated both those aspects so wonderfully, JESUS! i loved this.....and it wasn't predictable, WHICH IS SO REFRESHING.....FUCK YOU ASSHOLE, POST MORE OPEN MICS

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Rofl... everyone gonna be waiting on part 2. then lol, I guess I should get started rofl but damn everyone loves the imagery in this piece.

da da doo, upping for best open mic of the month lol, or atleast to get into the hall of fame...

dum dee dum dum... Ima keep dropping dope open mics till I become the new open mic king

i'm loving the imagery in this piece... i like the dialogue throughout and it wasn't confusing with the message.. this was a nice piece stay up! 1

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dum dum dum... lol thats some short ass feedback lol, but still apreciated

Feed me some feed here kido's

up up and away

Wow, this was a nice drop..
You had lots of emotions,..and nice feeling
you used nice wordplay, and good vocab..
nice imagery.... you really made the reader want to read more and more..
your structure was the only thing, it was like a heart beat... try to match up
your bars, and you would have gotten a higher school... but overall it was a very good drop... just elevate on your structure .... keep it up!

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