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these cracks, i run my hand over them ,feeling the rough and rigid , the indent of history that made its mark many years ago as if to retrace the past , quick judgements and assumptions conceived from the stories that shadows and old notes told following the trail of perfectly placed boards , toned and retired yet their strength comes from years of wear and tear , they alone have seen children grow into adults,cultured nights and gave direction the creaks speak of the treasures beneath the floor , a history the selection of steps covered in dark matter given to us by the sun's friend back when segregation was all the norm, this house stood for more the battle between the screen door and wind , its old foe like little kids looking for the ever present reaction tortured they have battled on occasion , ripped from the hinges and battered as it lay, wind and rain , soon though realization and eventually held up and put back together again. looking for the protection of others the porch was built droplets of blood and sweat soaked the beams , and supports into the seams red flowed , old womens dresses iron nails splintered pine driven deep towards the center fastened strong , to keep hold of its to foundation, lessons from winter the menage of thoughts and a purpose united the fore fronts all the while simple gusts made every attempt to destroy what they had worked so hard for the delicate balance was reinforced with a railing painted to match the sky boards rested in perfect unison, simultaneously sustaining the weight as others were submitted to the process in all they had the gratification the house stands there every time the door is opened : exhale when we leave when we return inhale us and we travel through out its head filling it with memories i'll finish this later
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hot vocab, flow was hot 2, very nice overall
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wow, this was totally kickin' you sun of a beach...haha, vocab was intense, i really liked the idea you based it on, really, not even lying...if only you could see my face, and realize the truth behind the smile....haha, that was my thought, of everlasting arrogance depicted and coriographed within the standing time of this momentarily, speechless thread........word, i'll stop now, haha, but yeah, really good, i like the line about "he battle between the screen door and wind , its old foe" i thought that was a super line, haha, the relations is maddenin.....anyways, this was really good, vocab was perfect and very intriguing, cant wait to read the rest.......beach
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thanks for the feed lol i'll finish this when i have some time
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lol if someone wants to finish it they can
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This is dope man, i like the topic,the creativity in this piece and your vocabulary,you describe everything so well, very imaginative with your words, keep dropping.1
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