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05-24-05, 05:49 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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Weird Dream
IP: 3C07 D4C1
O finally, O finally, in my bed feeling so comfy
I'm under my sheets, sleeping and snoring O finally, O finally, the night lurks above me My eyes close, without further or due mind start dreaming Sitting in the corner of the wall trembling Watching you and dad yelling absurd words Both feelings to each other are so dissembling My eyes and my heart, can’t take this much hurt The air is cold, but there’s heat in they’re eyes Slap slap, I gasped with shock under my breath Me a little kid, what protection can I provide? I shake my head left & right wishing it’s an myth I run upstairs, while my tears pouring out from within Run in my room, I’m pacing now, quickly lock door I jump in my bed, I shiver under the covers with chagrin Closed my eyes, heavily my tears leak, my heart is sore O please O please, let it be a dream O god, O god let this not be a reality O please O please, let it be a dream O god, O god let this not be a reality Where am I? Is the question that flashes in my mind I look down, and O SHIT, my bed…its…..flying Knowing that I’m scared of heights, I wish I was blind The wind quickly cools and leave marks of my crying Look down again, the lights of the cities were like Christmas It was a good sight, and I smile at this, feeling happy But still I was a little scared knowing I’m Groundless With an urge of awareness the bed went downward so speedy I hold on so tight, my heart beats now so uncontrollably My eyes couldn’t catch anything but I did hear screams Wishing my bed, knew the stop sign mean to stop on streets *thump* finally we stopped, still can feel the rush in my bloodstream Home sweet home, My beautiful house in my sight I dropped down from the bed, excitedly turn the knob Ran upstairs, Got in my bed sheets, As I heard goodnight I looked up, curious, but I was happy, it was my mom O finally, O finally, in my bed feeling so comfy I’m under the bed sheets, sleeping and snoring O finally, O finally in my bed feeling so comfy I woke up with a female voice saying “Good morning” I post this on rb..aka Julius Caesar...if you think i bitted. Leave feed. 1
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05-24-05, 07:25 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 3240 794D
Great job, nice vocabulary, you explained everything so well, and described the scene so well, imagery was prominent, told a bittersweet story..i liked it, keep dropping.1
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05-24-05, 07:26 PM
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Flyweight
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IP: 3C07 D4C1
Meh............................Just posting cause i know shit about poetry
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