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06-12-05, 07:57 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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Cheater - Sick Story Tellin
IP: 7F23 8EDF
this aint a true story, just some story tellin i decided to do.. peace... See when it started out, yo....everything was Nice and Sweet Id treat her Like a Queen and clung to every word that Wifey Speak In public she was Slightly Meek, but in the bedroom Nightly She a Feisty Freak, and wanted it a minimum of Twice a Week It was good, til one day she went Crazy, started Flippin over stupid shit, im jus like "Baby, why u Trippin?!?" "U see MAYBE, if you LISTENED, every Once and a While I wouldnt have to yell at u in Front of my Child But ur FUCKN worthless." "RELAX n jus Stop Cursin.." I tried to keep my cool as the anger i Got Worsened "Sweety go to bed, mommy needs a little Breathing Room" "Can u tuck me in?" "Sorry angel cant, im Leaving Soon.." N she went into her room, where she Closed and Locked the Door Then i went up to her mom, "Why u Posin Problems For??" "Cuz im SICK of U, enough is enough, aint takin SHIT from U A loser, and ur rapping is shit, wat kinda SPIC are U??" this Bitch Is Rude, n she gonna hear it cuz i aint Havin It "Ur FUCKED up, no wonder why ur daughers Daddy Split" Now she Mad as Shit, picked up a bottle n Threw It At Me Man I've had some girl problems before, but Few Attacked Me "WHAT THE FUCK IS WRONG WITH U? TELL ME WAT I DO EXACTLY" But she didnt even answer, she jus said "fuck YOU" n Slapped Me "U FUCKN BITCH" n pushed her away, dont care'f she'd Cry Again I got mah keys n left before my temper turned me Vio-lent I drove around, tryna cool off, relieve some Tension This stupid bitch, she went beyond the limit yo, and Then some I pulled up to mah Friend's, "Son, can i stay here for a Bit?" "Why wha happened wit ur girl?" "I dunno she fuckn Flipped.." So i crashed there n let the situation Calm Down Couldnt sleep, always wonderin whats going On Now See i couldnt play myself, cuz i know that i Need Her If Either "Leave Her" or "Beat Her" are my options then Neither So after a few days, i got Dressed and i Showered Feelin good, i was lookn sharp n Fresh in an Hour Then i left, first i went and bought a Chest full of Flowers Then I parked in front her house, took a Breath cuz its Now Or, Never, took a chance n started Walkn up the Stairs Opened up the door, it was Dark n nobody There Started creepin, through the rooms, slowly Leerin Around I got closer to her room n started Hearin some Sounds So i leaned against the door, put mah ear on the Wood All i heard was "OH YEAH...OH GOD FUCK ME GOOD" N my blood Boiled, felt my muscles startin to Tense Up My arms Coiled, both my fists jus suddenly Clenched Up IN MY ROOM?? IN MY BED?? YO I PAYED F' ALL THAT Thats when i went out back and got my Base-Ball Bat I SPENT THE LAST COUPLE OF DAYS, STUCK IN A DRAG WHILE IN MY BEDROOM, BITCH IS FUCKING SOME FAG?? I went back to the door, Gripped the Gat, about to Let Off Busted through the door and Ripped the Faggots fuckn Head Off N she jumped up, screamed "WHAT THE FUCK ARE U DOING??" "YOU THINK IM GONNA SMILE WHILE U GO ON AND SCREW HIM?!?! U TOOK MY CARE FOR WEAKNESS , NOW ITS TIME FOR SOME PAY BACK U STEP ON ME THEN FUCK A GUY?? NAH I DONT PLAY THAT DONT U FUCKN MOVE, WHERE THE FUCK IS STACI??" "in her Room.." I went inside, "Go and wait in Josh's Vroom Vroom!" She smiled, went to the car, and she closed the Car Door I went back into the room and reached for the Far Drawer Got the .44, "WHO THE FUCK U THINK U ARE WHORE??? "No! I didnt--" "SHUT THE FUCK UP N JUS GET ON THE HARD FLOOR I CARED FOR U AS MUCH AS MY ENTIRE LIFE ALLOWED NOW U PISS IT ALL AWAY BECAUSE WE HAD A FIGHT AND NOW U SPREADIN UR LEGS? TO NIGGAS U JUS MET ON MY BED?!?! FORGET IT UR DEAD, CUZ IMMA POP A LED IN UR HEAD SO ON UR FUCKING KNEES SLUT, N TAKE A DEEP BREATH NOW U WANNA CHEAT BITCH? GOOD....TRY AND CHEAT DEATH (*POW*)...
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.::BattleZ::. Last edited by Murdz : 06-17-05 at 02:31 AM. |
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06-12-05, 08:03 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
feed left on... A-sap (gay ass LL diss)
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06-12-05, 08:42 AM
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IP: A0C8 44A9
Word, this shit is dope..
Keeps you reading for sure with it's great flow, and wicked multies intertwined in it.. Pretty kick ass story, I like the line at the end, try and cheat death (*Pow*).. Dope drop, nice read for sure.. |
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06-13-05, 04:25 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
uppin this please...
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06-13-05, 04:49 AM
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Middle Weight
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IP: DEEC 8168
Long but ill the last line was an excelent finishing touch. You should go audio sounds like you've got the skills for it.
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06-13-05, 05:18 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
thanks fam.. uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
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06-13-05, 04:21 PM
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Do Re Mi
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IP: F974 6254
not gon lie i didnt read it all... but i heard tha last line was hott and ima say straight up, it was deff hottt
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06-13-05, 04:26 PM
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Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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IP: 473F 6D42
madd good here man kinda hard to read cuz its kinda little but that just make me get into the piece more errrthin was good hurr rom the flow to struture and basically the the whole piece was fantastic man good job like every aspect to this and u stayed on topic good job murdz keep droppin pieces like that aight
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  STARTING 2MORROW I WILL BE TRIPLE SIXES THATS GON BE MY NEW ACCOUNT SO THATS ME AIGHT CUZ IM SO FLY......LOL |
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06-14-05, 04:37 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
thankz fam uppinnnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn
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06-14-05, 08:20 AM
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in your system
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IP: 9E2F CDE8
MURDZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ!!!!!!
whats up? man, this was pretty vivid (love that word, lol)....great story actually, awesome flow, had some funny lines in there too Now she Mad as Shit, picked up a bottle n Threw It At Me Man I've had some girl problems before, but Few Attacked Me ^nice little suttle humour in there, haha but anyways, who cares if this was long, it kept me reading the whole time, and thats a great talent right there, keep it flowing and interesting, big props there.....and the story was cool too, ending was kinda vio-lent, lol....but i like the closer, ahha...good stuff man, keep for sure check-yo-pms beach 
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this world is a drug, and everyone's selfish FLY FREE |
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06-16-05, 03:44 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
thankz yo uppinnnnnnnnnnn
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06-16-05, 04:08 AM
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New to RV
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IP: E796 97D8
wats up homie,im only 13 and hopin not to go through that same problem when i get older.it was real good.man,it had me in tha story like it was my gurl.im a writer myself.i write stories,poems,and i rap, and everybody that reads them thinks im good ... although im only 13 i can truely say...damn boy u got talent
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06-16-05, 05:18 AM
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Ka.Nek.ShuN
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IP: 7F23 8EDF
lol thanks youngen lookin foward to seein ur stuff
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06-16-05, 09:23 AM
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Soon to be legendary
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IP: D5B6 470C
this sucked.....go die
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06-16-05, 11:41 AM
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this good
IP: 4CDF 7B48
this good brev u got some talent and how do u get your link so i can put it on one of my rhymes
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