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		http://www.soundclick.com/bands/8/straightaim_music.htm  
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
	yo this is a complete song its just called "incomplete" cuz im explainin how i didnt find my own style and how rap's dying, and other thangs...i didnt really tackle a topic straight on point but listen to this shit and leave feed and i'll RTF here's my links: http://community.rapverse.com/showt...t=198954&page=3 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=200371  | 
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		oh and i warn u this is not a mix this me on the mic 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
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		I cant listen to this shit man... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			Quality is fucking terrible 
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		whateva punk fuck u it aint that bad 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
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		quality is bad... ya flow is off too, it's like you not flowin but you talking over the beat, lyrics need to be upped. ya delivery is really boring too. keep workin at it, holla back. 
		
	
		
		
		
		
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		thanx for the feed uppin... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
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 LMAO You got a problem, set up a battle, if not, shut the fuck up and fix your quality 
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		ok....listening.... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			like the intro to the beat... beat is dope.... still gotta work on your flow...even though its gettin a lil bit better with every song you do.....some of the lyrics are coo...some i wasnt feelin...like the benchin line..... you mos def gotta work on mixing and getting the quality better....i cant tell if you have a hook...it all sounds like one big verse to be honest....which it may be....ok now i hear the hook...put some effects on the hook....to make it stand out some... just keep workin man 
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		overall its jus kinda boring to listen to..like they said..it sounds like ur jus talkin over the beat..ur flow is off..ur lyrics definitly need to be elevated.. 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
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		BEAT IS DOPE........... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			dogg..........its kinda hard to listen to this...........delivery needs a lot of work..... energy you know......... you could spit the same lyrics but if you come wit energy behind your words.... it would be dope..... for real...... sounds like you almost reading off the screen....... try to memorize your verse..... and you'll come iller over the beat you spitting to...... juss a lil advice........ lyrics is aight man fo real......... juss upp your energy and memorize your verse..... it takes time...... but you'll step your game up doggs...... stay up.......... keep dropping doggs i see you......... 
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		thanx for the feedback dawg im still uppin on this shit 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
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		god damn...ur vocals are HIGH as shit 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			
		
		
		
		
	
	gave me a fucking migraine wtf hell no 1  | 
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		lol that cuz i am as high as shit... 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
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		Aight, your flow is so choppy it sounds like your talking with a rhythm. Beat is good, but your lyrics don't reflect the beat well. You said something then a gun went off, not even related. I couldn't listen to more then half of this, keep elevating. I won't play it again till you get your flow smoother. 
		
	
		
		
		
		
			
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		the gun was coincidence....but i had ta have the beat...and ur right i have ta elevate but u dont have ta be so fuckin stuck up bout it 
		
	
		
		
		
		
		
	
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