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Cuz I'm Old Skool Baby
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lol thanx, but i cant use nameplay, it wasnt about anybody in particular!
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Light Weight
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That was good, good lyrics and showed your emotions well.
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The Emcee Shogun
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nice stuff man..but u really didnt come to complex in ur vocab try writing big words and rhyming them. Also ur flow was good I liked ur structure pretty normal, but the main thing is better vocab. I usually take 10-20 minutes to write a piece with big words so im sure u can take the time too lol. Also u need to end stronger, like since u wrote about this which has been done before then u need to make everything rhyme and on point, and love and truct dont rhyme lol. But keep writing and readin you'll get better fast man keep it up-PEACE
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**the council**
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i don't think i've read any of your stuff before but i thought this was pretty good.....you came strong with the emotion....however work on your structure and upp your vocab......5/10
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One Mic
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yer i thort this woz good, it flowed really well, and it woz easy to follow. 8/10
rtf on sumthin in my sig
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-Not On My Level-
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yea.....shit was good....keep writing man....work on your vocab. man........overall it was good though......8/10.....
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