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Old 08-16-05, 06:10 PM   #1
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Exclamation Off My Chest

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Holdin my heart as the pain runs through my vain
Cos the game i aimed aint givin me gain
I'm sittin on the floor n lookin at d door&feeling lonely like my nigga A
Puttin it down to remember when my love trigga shot his babe
I'm so alone,i'm on my own but i know God is backin my bone
Even if life can b harder dan a stone ima learn its part of bein grown
Toomany chances lost,too many irons rut on my shoulder all i got is dust
But i knock 'em off like my gut cos thers a clear distinction btw me& a mutt
Meditating on d blows i've owned a bitch wudnt stand it if she 4ked 4 a loan
A hoe trynna eat from the life of a pro she dont know dat i cream up her cone
The happenin here is like the present situation in Nigeria
OBJ is still flippin bills so ur hatin is like a musical viagra
Like decimal repetitions death & murdser r my themes of reflection
So if you bitches wanna come get me its like seekin ur life destination



Its funny how ya mouth keeps runnin when im absent
Then ya stuffin ya pants with shit when my arm's present
Y'all bitches got it twisted thinkin i'm here 2 humourize your asses
I'ma burst my liquid on ur face like breaking glasses
We came to earth outta different pussies but my life is ur prob
This aint much of art now watch me dick the difference in ya in a throb
In a bitch fight you headin 6feet unda my feet for ya win
"Bee" for "Bitch" my shits come heavy and you fly in the ring
Y'all think to swiss for free forgettin this game hurts mo dan a sting
Junks think to conjure rhymes,that their talents multi
But these punks sink in allure cos they locked in kamasutra P-H-D
You may pull me to the ground but,fuck it, i stunt and make it shake
if u love urself respect me like Pounds cos i worth mo dan a erthquake
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Old 08-16-05, 06:15 PM   #2
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Old 08-16-05, 06:19 PM   #3
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Holla @ Mami

I Like Ya Style

Maybe If U In Ma Area We Can Talk Sum Shit Through
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Old 08-16-05, 06:28 PM   #4
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lol...i reside in europe dawg..hella far
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Old 08-18-05, 05:15 AM   #5
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uppin this stuff yo...

feed...feed
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Old 08-18-05, 06:45 AM   #6
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hmmm o.k....i couldn't quite grasp the concept of this drop...but i'm guessing it was about random stuff hence the title....anyway your flow was off so work on that....present each line so that its near enough the same length as this makes it easier to read.....try not to shorten words to one letter....for example use are instead of r.....overall though this drop was aight....work on all that i mentioned though and it will be better.....i look forward to reading more from you
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Old 08-18-05, 07:09 AM   #7
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i like this piece to it's kind of tightness or whatever it's called but i like it
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Old 08-18-05, 01:46 PM   #8
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I love your overall attitude in this piece, it's not something you read every day. It ain't brag and boasting, it's like ya title said: just getting things off your chest and the approach you used is definitely feeling. Vocab was cool, flow off here and there but overall okay. I just like how you worded stuff just the way they are and shit, truth spoken and all.

Keep it up!
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Old 08-21-05, 12:21 PM   #9
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i liked this but honestly WTF is it bout lmao ...nice tho tight lyrics good flow most of time erm good emotion good piece of randomness lmao erm rating


8.7/10

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Old 08-21-05, 01:17 PM   #10
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look this was ok but why make the reader strain their eyes reading small letters? LOL well anyway you got it off your chest doe girl
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Old 08-21-05, 05:19 PM   #11
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y'all thanx for the fb's...and to madrapper lol thats becoz i had my eyes that way when i was spittin it live...u know
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