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08-18-05, 05:04 PM | #1 | ||||||
New to RV
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short bored freestyle
IP: A96B 5A0B
fuck the world let that shit blow up fuck a girl they just bitches n sluts let um sip on the nut than let the door hit em in the butt the pistol is tucked up under the leather seats on the truck n in the trunk is a mack thats whats up red beam attached my hat leaned to the left n back the tecca nina on my lap hollow tips in it that fo fifth in the back seat all black chrome clip intact now thats heat ar 15 n 2 a's in my boys blazer bout to set a blaze on the block glocks bring danger chamber filled up we real bangers kill us never we will trust in our guns bust whenever we feel its a must u get severed returned to the dust murda burn in us so you can get touched up when the burners tucked ill burn you fucks
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08-26-05, 11:25 AM | #2 | ||||
Middle Weight
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IP: 8A05 210E
it was a good bored free but 1 thang is don't jumble all ya words 2getha cuz it makes tha reader have 2 try real hard 2 catch tha flow & tempo of it, structure needs fixin, try 2 elevate in ur rhyming game step it up more, use sum meta's in ur lyrics 2 liven it up fa sho ight ~1~LUV~1~THUG~
rtf: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=206095
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