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Old 09-12-05, 07:54 PM   #1
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Crushed by the abuse taken deep the the soul
You see im an orphan who has no lifetime goal
Crazed victim, witness of my parents murder...
Stuck in this dump just cuz of a court order.......
Getting raped everynight by the home leader...
To wake up in the morning at times not so eager
Rhyming straight madness Exact hate for people
As I pray for my parents back kneeling on the steeple
Agony pain everyday is the same I am not normal
I get melested by my guardian I write about it in my journal
Devistated by my surroundings thinking with an evil mind
Death is my guardians future as I always say revenge is mine
Not Being Kind with my anger I shall unleash it at my own will
Being stealth in the night cloaked yea thats my true life skill
Trying to keep his death secret not let the other orphans know
Born a christian I will be sent to hell for my sin but its time to let go
Life is not easy, you see you must play the cards you are dealt
Regardless if you are rich or are melested and then pain is felt
Coming down to the last nights my guardian will be at life
Happy to know his demise oh for his death I now thrive
Finally it is time to end the madness for once and for all
Pocket knife sealed as I stay low to the ground and crawl
Creeping closer to his room as I enforce the knife at his neck
I grin with joy as he is struggling to take a single breath
Gasping for air I smile knowing I had given my revenge
This moment is unforgettable its a highlighting event
Confessing to the cops knowing that I'm guilty as charged
Given 3 years in juvi for being physically and mentally scarred
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Old 09-12-05, 07:56 PM   #2
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Old 09-12-05, 09:01 PM   #3
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uppin.................
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Old 09-12-05, 09:04 PM   #4
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Nice man. Crazy images. I liked it a lot. Fix up the lines a little and it'd be better. Wordness. RTF on http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=208371 please.
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Old 09-12-05, 09:06 PM   #5
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thanks man, uppin fo mo feed.......and ill rtf tomorrow 1
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Old 09-12-05, 09:17 PM   #6
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Old 09-13-05, 04:18 PM   #7
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Old 09-13-05, 09:57 PM   #8
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Old 09-14-05, 09:45 PM   #9
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Ayyo, this was a solid drop...I liked the imagery you used..followed up by your outstanding emotion...only problem was your structure..i couldnt quite get a good flow...Your vocab was decent..overall 8/10..keep it up man
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Old 09-14-05, 09:47 PM   #10
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thanks man...appreciate it........
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Old 09-18-05, 07:17 PM   #11
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i liked it but one thing i couldnt get a flow but good could be betta work on it it will be bomb
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Old 09-18-05, 08:12 PM   #12
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aint gonna work on it, its done lol......................ye uppin i guess
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