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I wrote and recorded this track in 30 minutes last week. Only my 2nd solo track.

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It's Called "Feel The Pain"



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Your flow is a lil wierd, like rushed in the hook a bit. the hook is overall not bad nice emotion and voice in it. the verses were good your flow is real good, I can really see you being somin in a few monthes on rv. your quality aint to bad either. lyrics are very good and consistant, I can't wait to do a track wit you. overall good track man, stop doin single tracks about god though haha.

rtf in my Natural Killa diss

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is this the hook?...sounds like it

not bad...but again, hooks should be catchy...repetition is key

your phrase "brighter day"...could have been your focal point...Accent that part


ur flow sounds on point for the most part

I could hear u take a big breath...or swallow...that wasn't good, esp. at the point in the flow it happened


lyrics are pretty decent sounding


6.9-7/10 track


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