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Old 11-23-05, 11:27 PM   #1
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what im clamin(hotttest shit i ever did)

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this is wid some help from my cuz detrimental

I dont claim to be a gangsta i just I claim to be a thug
for ya disbeleivers Im not tryin to be wanksta all on drugs
i come forceful im a tsunami wave guarenteed to flood
i dont drink or smoke im high on life and i dont need no bud
haters learn to repsect me when im done and its all ova
i'm standin tall above all you know i'm just a soldja
i dont give up i dont give in no matter what somebody says
yall can keep talkin all ya want cuz im not one to forget
ill hold grudges till the very end im just not known to quit
You rollin with about 5 dudes, my dudes in rows of 10
so what i wasn't brought up this way you need to mind ya business
Go on and be fake sooner or later you'll see how far lies will get ya
The world don't understand me i don't care i stand alone
Give me a booth and a mic guarantee i'll hand ya flow
You want beef you got it, just with me you'r luck's worse
Save your dignity i don't need to make money off of cuss words

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Old 11-24-05, 01:28 PM   #2
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Old 11-25-05, 07:40 PM   #3
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who dis da next will smith of rap? y it so bad 2 use curse words?i swear niggaz sometimes 2 goody 2 shoes 2 b real thugs...lol...n e ways nice drop jus work on better voc dis was jus a lil 2 simple n plain keep it up though peace
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Old 11-25-05, 08:05 PM   #4
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This is whack as fuck.....i'll go deeper into why. The rhyming was weak and the a couple of bars didnt even rhyme. The whol concept of you being a thug, being high of life doesn't go with you being a good kid and not cursin. You sounded just like will smith like ^^he said. Work onhaving some more metaphors, multies, and add better vocab.
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Old 11-27-05, 08:13 AM   #5
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My scheme bold like extreme cold make cats shiver
Body reflex shaky complex and achy sensations quiver
No heat and flow unique when I go in streets with a river
Of rhymes like a stream of water scream and slaughter
Completely drown clowns have them stuck out on the altar
On a raised structure blaze this culture give sacrifice to god
Christ among men makes them nice from within because sin is odd
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