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11-30-05, 01:47 PM | #1 | ||||
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Have You Ever!!
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HAVE YOU EVER?
have you ever fallin in love so deep its hard to tell whats truth and lies? When you look into there eyes all your worries disapear.......I have! It feels good untill something you do ends it all in one minut you can loose everything you have, and all you'll have left is the memories and your broken heart... You'll find ways to alter the pain like alcohol it makes you forget but it always comes back, drugs well..... that increases your emotional sence. i'v learned what it feels like to have sompthing so important to you make you feel like shit, the guilty one, and make you feel like you've failed at something you've givin ' so much for. I gave it my all but sometimes that isnt good enough. you'll need to think , you'll need to see if you still bleed. have you ever had somone say I love you and make you fell all worm and at ease? sometimes people are ment to be and some arnt one day you'll find somone who is the one but untill then all steps inbetween are just steps to finding your true love....... http://community.rapverse.com/showt...09&page=1&pp=15 http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=210426 Last edited by Gangsta Kim : 12-14-05 at 10:01 AM. Reason: change ending |
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11-30-05, 01:49 PM | #2 | ||||
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Yo I didn't get to finsh the poem class was ending ..................but its all good
Last edited by Gangsta Kim : 12-14-05 at 09:56 AM. |
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12-09-05, 11:14 AM | #3 | ||||
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IP: D4FA A3B8
uppin for feed back................................
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12-09-05, 12:38 PM | #4 | |||||||
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holy shit! def good poem, i mean kinda original but u did ya own thing w/ dis.....could use a lil more vocab in dis but overall pretty dope....
"I gave it my all but sometimes that isnt good enough." ^^fav line i can def relate to dat line n also da rest of ur poem....nice emotion.....keep up da good work ma.....1 |
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12-09-05, 12:39 PM | #5 | |||||||
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oh n a lil 411 for u...u need 2 linkz or dis thread will get closed
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12-14-05, 10:02 AM | #6 | ||||
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IP: D4FA A3B8
thanx man . im new to this so......... hey i changed the ending let me know what u think kk?...........
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12-16-05, 08:11 AM | #7 | |||||||
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still dope....da endin wouldnt of mattered....so nuttin changed from my prospective...still a dope piece for a newbie
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12-19-05, 08:46 PM | #8 | ||||
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thanx . i new ur opion wouldnt change but i like the new ending better eh?. thanx
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12-19-05, 08:47 PM | #9 | ||||
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uppin for feed back.................................
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