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Old 03-31-06, 03:28 AM   #1
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Old 03-31-06, 05:27 AM   #2
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first time I heard you spit bro, liked it. Could do with a bit more anger in your voice,but this track was cool, Flows ok,skipped a few spots,but nothing to major, lyrics and content was solid.
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Old 04-01-06, 10:16 PM   #3
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I thought the beat was dope.. Lyrics were good as well. Flow was pretty nice the majority of the time. But I agree with Ys, it would sound much better with more anger in your verse.. Pretty good delivery.. nice job.
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Old 04-02-06, 11:27 AM   #4
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The beat is aight. Your delivery is good.Flow is pretty good too, your lyrics are ok. A little more anger like the two before said would probably help the song overall but even w/o it it's a cool track.
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Old 04-02-06, 03:30 PM   #5
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listening..beat's coming in nice so far. beat's actually pretty IIILLLLLLLLLLLLL son.

Your vocals should go down a sliightt bit in the reverb. EQing your highs open would be real nice. The rhymes were nice lyrically, your timing was slightly off in some of the lines but that's just me being observant and noticing it. like you started a second to a second and a half too soon on the first line. Honestly man, I think the stuff that was off in this is things you'll solidify by virtue of continually spitting over time to be honest. Nothing you should be leaping out to fix immediately because they're small.


BUT STILL FIX EM!! lol

btw, who did this beat?
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Old 04-02-06, 07:55 PM   #6
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I thought the beat was dope.. Lyrics were good as well. Flow was pretty nice the majority of the time. But I agree with Ys, it would sound much better with more anger in your verse.. Pretty good delivery.. nice job.


^^^i agree completely.

so you produced those beats yourself??? that shit was hot, im really feelin' 'em. man, im trying to get on that "coming clean" track with ya. whats up with it??? theres no rush at this exact moment, but im trying to fuck with ya on some tracks, word. we'll record some shit in a few....if your down.

get at me. one...


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Old 04-08-06, 05:05 AM   #7
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i love ur name bro.....u ever read his writings ??

have a page full of it..some crazy stuff


quality is nice....emotion is good n shit....sumthings off..jus can't tell what..lyrics r tightness..ima havta rewind to catch em all cuz im typing while i listen...[is a good thing]..wow..it's short tho...hmm..maby work on presence a bit..and delevery...

like ur flow...is a bit askward like mine...tyhe choke lines nice..like the rain drop line too

yea..jus polish up ur mic presence a bit bro

hot shit

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Old 04-09-06, 08:18 PM   #8
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What's hot:
The beat

flow was alright


What's not:
The beat...go figure...the sample sounded 80-ish
delivery was bland and the vocal quality could be upped


Overall: decent at best



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