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Old 05-16-06, 06:09 AM   #1
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"Knight in Shining Armor"...Real Deep Song For The Ladies...Leave Links, I'll RTF...

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A tribute track to my girl...

Hopefully everybody can chill to it.

One of my best in my own opinion, even though I recorded it when I had a cold.

Leave links and I'll return the favor ASAP.

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227798
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=227990
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Old 05-16-06, 01:44 PM   #2
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How gay...

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Old 05-16-06, 03:03 PM   #3
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Listenin, this beat is tight...has that dedication feel to it..hook is good, aint rlly feelin the mixing on it a lil..like the lyrics...these lyrics are real tight...im sure she was reall happy when she heard this..You can tell u had a great emotion when u wrote this..this is one of my favourite from u, hook is growin on me alot..if u had a singer on this it wud jus wrap it up...\

Flow: 4/5
Delivery: 5/5
Emotion: 5/5
Pronounciation: 3/5
Lyrics: 5/5
Quality: 3/5

Overall (out of 20): 16.9/20
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Old 05-16-06, 03:15 PM   #4
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beat real mellow feel...hoook was tight good shit right there... lyrics are good...lack a little bit of emotion...ad loops and a lil bit off... lyrics are dope .... girls love when you do songs about them...i did a track to my girl like a year ago and she came over yestarday and put it on a c.d. cuz she lost the other one......but anyways...1st verse was dope..good flow didnt fall of at all....chorus back in...shits deep...real easy going flow on all theese verse....i like this track... i liked birds in the metal better........good shit le.
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Old 05-16-06, 03:52 PM   #5
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Thanks for the feed.

Uppin' for some more...I'ma hit some of your songs up in a bit, Summers.
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Old 05-16-06, 05:18 PM   #6
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i like the beat...its chill...nice

hook kicks in....its aright...its good...a lil catchy....theres just something that i think its missing...to make it a great hook....maybe if you would added another stack to the stand out parts of the hook...and added a flanger to em...it woulda added to it.......i dunno...its just missing that extra push to make it bananas...but i do like it...better than a WHOLE lot of hooks on this site...it has mad potential....

flow is coo...could be a lil more smooth...its a bit choppy in a few parts...not alot...but here and there it could be touched up...

delivery is coo...presence is nice.....i think u could switched up the tones of your voice with what your saying a lil more...u did a bit...but i think if you woulda switched your tone up with everything u said...it woulda seemed more like you meant what your were saying more....and def. woulda added to the song......


overall this song was pretty tight man....could use a few minor touch ups.....but i enjoyed listening....i actually listened a few times....good job
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Old 05-16-06, 06:18 PM   #7
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Hmm honestly I'm not feelin this one. The beat just seems not that good man, sounds cheesy n shit. A little to slow as well, I found it like you have a fast flow and it didn't fit with a styled beat like this. Your lyrics are good and emotion though, very deep and a lot of imgery with it. Overall I'm not feelin this, I think you could have picked a better beat and made a way better song.

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Old 05-16-06, 07:04 PM   #8
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beat is typical LE style = mystical

good


flow is good


lyrics are good


work on using more inflections in ur tone...ur delivery bored on monotonous in this track



good verse tho






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Old 05-17-06, 03:03 PM   #9
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Thanks for the feed...returning favors today.
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