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Old 06-09-06, 08:09 PM   #1
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Key to his brain ( sample track off Poetic Artist Youth mindstate Album)

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Me? ( Sample track to Poetic Artist's, Youth mindstate)

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Lyrics, so if you feel theres a accent barrier, read along
im street legal defeat people,never see evil
i stay vigulant on heavy stimulants never given a shit
you know me thru your local,corrputing vocals with a lyrical choke hold
i never heard a you ,you checkin my shit like theres a pervert in you
im unexplainable, unmaintanable brains un drainable knowledge is 360 degrees
Im flipping these trees not cripping and b's just ripping these steez
im an interlectual, just manafesting all my years of anger
im a person who loves rap,understand why doves flap twice before flight
i ignore bright light,it could be the gate....or is hell my fate
i drop ryhmes nearer the date never scared a the hate,im prepared to be great
focus on the mission ahead
have million swishing im dead
past actions left your ass asking
who laughs last grabs the cash and dash
live life for MA double S E y
fogive your envy no guessing why
stuck in your subconious mind
so much hype apon this rhyme
still the same since day one, no essence lost
praying to god and ask how much his blessings cost
i stalk death or is it the other way round
fuck it, earths my play ground
follow my own path, carry my own cross
be my own man and my own boss
daily feel the pain of earth stabbing my heart
like mediavel horses tied to my legs and dragging me apart
thoughts could fill a hundred libary shelfs
id rather be broke then sell out to have wealth
I see through your insecure lies
you would shut your mouth if you are wise
place mirrors behind me so i can
look into the past and see what the future demands
was labeled out of control by society
one turn of the key is the only way theyll say good bye to me
Mind runs deeper than your imagination
willing to fix each and every damaged nation
Got to much love some easily turns to hate
Tryna path my own road,and pray heavens my fate
im afraid of god, thats why I speak so harsh
but im his key to the devils brain thats why i keep so dark
at time i feel im missing a peice of heart
yin and yang is chemically unbalanced and at war
peace si what we strive for
but at times i look to the stars and ask what im alive for
I know exactly who am i am on earth
what if wish my ma never gave birth


Props need to go to anno domni for his redemtion beat

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Old 06-15-06, 09:08 PM   #2
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ok...in the nicest way possible....I hated it. like...i didnt like a single thing about it. first off...beat choice didnt work well with ur voice. ur voice was HELLA MUFFLED. u should work on some mixxing. ur flow was more like just talking, and talking, and talking...did u even listen to the beat when u wrote the song?

id suggest going out and buying a new microphone that isnt $15 dollars and from Radio Shack. next...go download a program where u can do some basic vocal mixxing. and then, go spend about 3 hours...and dig thru Soundclick to find some instrumentals that might match ur voice betta.

AND WHEN ALL THAT IS SED AND DONE... go turn on a Cassidy track and take some notes on flowwing. then re-rewrite, re-record, and re-mix it. good luck
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