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~Mass Destruction~
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I changed it to bar form, pressed enter.. hehehe... what y'all think, I think it's decently sutible for these times we're facing, check it!
Armageddon, arms-are-set-in… every direction, toward every big nation, a leader’s intension, for inhalation, and evacuation… is feudal, fuck if you’re active or neutral, it comes to war, we’re all useful, now let me give the latest news y’all: U.S under attack, by Iraq, Iraq under attack by U.S, the food supplies are cut to less, and then Korea so stressed, comes right behind towards the mess/ U.S. wages a war with Saddam, India takes on Pakistan, the Soviets with Taliban, China Invades up Taiwan, and it goes on and on, until the whole world is gone… All of the Terrorists and Capitalists, Communists and Monarchists, are gonna stop-the-peace, becoming anarchists, and it’s not gonna cease, it’s the Apocalypse... where the Horsemen, are those men, who don’t tend, to stop until it all ends/ It’s all gon’ happen simultaneously, amazingly... it takes one spark, for everything to go dark, ain’t that ironic in part, that’s what I feel in my heart… The super powers, bout to start nuclear showers, bombs are surely to devour... everything that lives, everything that breaths, everything that plants a seed, everything and everyone that anyone has ever seen/ a scene of radioactive motions, an eruption of destruction, dropping everything that functions/ It’s like it’s human nature, to venture, to what is known as danger, soon we’ll become endangered… or wiped out, it’s lights out, without doubt/ it’s extinction, and it stinks-son… It’s gon’ be reaching us all, from Alaskans to Australians, this shit is strenuous, too much for many and too much for Alias/ this is too real, gotta reveal, all that I feel/ so pass the mic, before I reach the afterlife, why do we have to fight? / It’s the end of the world, a global slaughter, say goodbye to my girl, and my mother, cause women come first, that be the order/ then my pop’s, and my boys, this where it stops, no more joy, cause our whole world is destroyed/ The only thing that holds a vision, without fiction, is religion/ people run to their beliefs, to catch relief, before they drop like autumn’s leafs… So what’s the next stage? A radioactive wave/ inflates and it enslaves us, until the heart just fails us, and there is nobody that can save us/ mutation, deformation, and so many mutilation, all this shit we gon’ be facing/ and what happens to the earth? It ends up drowning itself, because the polar caps melt, the human species just fell… Man everything that was written, apocalyptic scriptures, are speaking, and reaching... their periods, this time it’s serious, dropping down billions by billions/ it’s a delay, of Y2K, it’s here to stay, plans to decay, bout anything that’s in its way, and by the way, it sounds horrific but the date is today, it’s realistic, it’s doomsday as they say… damm that was long, hope y'all read it all though Last edited by Alias-C : 03-18-03 at 12:07 PM. |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
I REMEMBER DIS 1,IT WAZ LONG AS SHIT,BUT RAW IN ITS OWN SENSE,SUM PARTS COULDA BEEN MO COMPLEX BUT IT HAD ITS MOMENTS LIEK WHOA,SO PROPS,DIS WAZ DEEP,N IT HAD A SOILD POINT,NICE,VERY NICE,1
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IP: 5D75 9225
this was nice its one of da best shit i saw on this keep it strait
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IP: 24A3 0EF0
nice shit
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IP: 399E F0FD
thanx y'all, but come on.... I need some constructive criticism ovah here!
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IP: 3391 86E9
i rember this piece too. mine was lost!
ill reply wit the critique in a lil while..sorry im busy at the moment ~1~ |
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"My 2 Cents..."
IP: 399E F0FD
Well I have some CC for ya dog....
I like the central meaning behind htis piece, and the overall topic of this drop. The stayle of writing you use is to damn hard to read...I hate paragraph form verses...shit gets to cluttered, you have vocab, and you have descent wordplay...but you can focus more on gettin your verses in Bar form, and make your verses more coherent.... I really had no problem with this drop other than the formation of the verse....This was and Ill ass pice dog, keep spittin....... P.E.A.C.E. Return the favor pl....... |
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IP: 886A A593
the only critisism i could come up with was to use ( like the 13th apostle said) and this is what i think he meant....is to seperate it out more....with / or just hitting enter at the end of where you would stop and then proceed.....
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Advice taken... thanx
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