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GetCash vs. Darkshells313
IP: 5153 3B92
remember 8- 10 bars
standard votin and all that shit u go first, goooodluuck |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
who is this nigga name get cash
when my steel flash it will be the perfect definition of quick cash I'll go first just to quench my thirst I hope ths Kid have some idendity Because when your mother have to visit the morgue you want be in your physical form maybe not in the spirit because my rhymes is spirit so I just spit it so you can hear it |
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IP: 4577 CD9A
your turn
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IP: 5153 3B92
uh huh dont even try to play da cash game wit me
cuz ill go 'freeworld" on ur ass ,3 -1-3 ur mommmy gonna be the one cryin in church cuz ill liquidate u down and sell u to stem cell research LEMMME TURN MY SHit up rite now so u can hear it by the way , great move ryhmin spirit wit spirit "is it in u?" when u talkin bout quenchin ur thirst " gonna be a while " when u layin face up in dat hearse im all about the bills snigga ,tryin to get in ur purse , so when getcash spit at u , he gonna get reimbursed |
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IP: 5153 3B92
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/sho...&threadid=32222 here my link , dont wanna get banned u fuckin MOD bitches
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IP: 4577 CD9A
who vote
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Vote=GetCash
IP: 4577 CD9A
I thought this was a weak battle, but let's break it down.
I actually thought it was a little too short. Undercooked Beef. ________________________________________________ Darkshells: -when my steel flash it will be the perfect definition of quick cash I'll go first just to quench my thirst- These are your strongest bars. This is ALL very SIMPLE. You know... it's not the worst stuff I've seen here. But where is the vocab? Throw me a damn punch. Hurt 'em! When you get to here: -you want be in your physical form maybe not in the spirit because my rhymes is spirit so I just spit it so you can hear it- That is straight garbage. It doesn't mean a whole lot, you rhyme the same word, the grammar is just difficult to acknowlege as a fluid whole. The last line is not offensive though. Just keep working, you seem to understand the need to rhyme and have some flow. Work work work. ________________________________________________ :GetCash: -ur mommmy gonna be the one cryin in church cuz ill liquidate u down and sell u to stem cell research- -im all about the bills snigga ,tryin to get in ur purse , so when getcash spit at u , he gonna get reimbursed- These are good exchanges. Overall I think the flow was all right, I think care was taken to have fairly even bars. Although it stumbles on bar4, the punch makes it worth it. You opened and closed well. The weakest bars were: -LEMMME TURN MY SHit up rite now so u can hear it by the way , great move ryhmin spirit wit spirit- Should have just left it alone man. The next line is "underdeveloped" although I like its follow, so I won't gripe too loudly. Overall a solid verse. Clearly enough to score a solid victory here. |
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IP: E2AA 3874
cash dawg, u need some work....serious
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