This one is called BETTER BE.......



You better reconnect to reali/ty
Recheck your lyrical abili/ty
Before you chase publici/ty
You lack verbal manoeuvrabili/ty
Yo am serious you need a thera/py

Your rhyme /better be
Original and sealed
On top it /better be
Accurate and real
When I am done you /better be
Looking for shield
When I cruise your block you /better be
Swallowing your cookie rocks
When Cali finest on the spot you /better be
Looking for a glock
When I rhyme then I stop you /better be
Ready to spit hard as a rock
When I spit I release heat like sun you /better be
Ready to fight or run, little one

You better be holding rhyming degree
Before you approach me
You better be mastering a new technique
Before you disrespect me
You better be one of the finest
Before you get smacked like styl-ess
You better be a true G
Before you think to roll with me

You better be ready to pay the fees
With sick steeze you shaking like you cracked your knees
You better be ready to pledge
We leave Mcs bloody and stretched

HOLLA

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BlAh bLaH BlaH.............only thang that comes to mind when readin this.....yo fam u need to elevate

The repitition didnt really work, find music boring when it repeats itself, I liked the start though:
"You better reconnect to reali/ty
Recheck your lyrical abili/ty
Before you chase publici/ty
You lack verbal manoeuvrabili/ty
Yo am serious you need a thera/py"

Try using longer lines and shorter repeats

Yo man, what's up with this!, yo u sound like a broken record...
I think the best thing on this post is that picture of Hally Berry! man... lol... nah I'm just fucking with you...
"You better reconnect to reali/ty
Recheck your lyrical abili/ty
Before you chase publici/ty
You lack verbal manoeuvrabili/ty
Yo am serious you need a thera/py" Yo like my man above me said, you started off pretty strong, but what's up with separating the word with a slash... don't make sense to me...
Keep working on it man, keep posting, it's the only way to get better
Peace

AIght yo critism needed and i got it thanks even though i don't really care..lol Yo i know i shouldnt keep repeating......but u learn from yo mistakes.....as ussual

more feeds needed

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yeah manzolio, elevate... some ish... yeah, critism... no, none saw here ish,

props

respect

peace

if you read some of my stuff i dont like the gangster styles all that much... but like everyone else i gotta give you some credit for that start... and to actually make me not hate something that is about glocks and bloody emcees... is an achievement on its own... keep rhymin