Hey yo, im kinda new up in here. So here is a verse I dropped in Rapworlds. Check me out and tell me what you think. Some lines you might not understand cuz it relates to rapworlds. And I'll probably get replys like "why would you post somethin from another forum??" So, heres my answer, I just wanted to know how members from here would judge it.

Check it, yo, like this

Destined to be the ruler, I rock the crown to the extreme
Though it seems I lost my place, The previous tourney, I redeemed
Myself wit ill rhymes, Niggaz get a glance at my head
Hate on me, but not my rhymes, for if they did, they would know I was ahead
From the beginning, My presence of skillz is makin its mark
Though I always knew I was destined, Happy times get dark
Had to handle some beef wit Paul, caught a case wit his soldier
His pigeons, I mold them, but the hate got colder
Dropped a "Message For the Fake Niggaz" that lit up my presense
Handled my opponents like my b***hes, threw em down like peasants
Accepted my crown, hyenas and vultures started scatterin
Requestin I battle them, when my present stage was a cattle pin
I was down and recoverin from SICK flows I spit at them
Niggaz knitted a cell, bounded me unless I rattle with them
So I strattled with them, but my condition was in no position
To get attacked by my villians, my flow they wasn't feelin
Now boastin, them niggaz think they really killin
But with a dose of penicillin, I drop this and transform into the villian
Redealin wit my problems, I toss em away like banana peel-ins
Their skillz, Im steady milkin, Brought back the kid they was feelin
Originally, the Don, my style and flow Im steady buildin
I don't do this for dough, Just cuz I know I can kill em
But I keep it fair, I keep it real and Don't do like the Indians was by the pilgrims
Just hit them wit hard attacks that have them thinkin bout nil-in
Them cards, I own this game, I been dealin the rounds so far
Trump wit spades cuz I represent the highest rising star
The Sun, the Moon, I drop unearthly verses from Mars
Now Im slick as the wheels on my car, thank GOD I made it this far
For he opened my eyes, I flow wit the sky, we a team
At first it was a blurry dream, Now Im makin my mark as
King

uppin fo votes

hello???

i've peeped some of your other stuff and i'd have to say this is one of your better ones... you're improving... keep rhymin

Wut up fam? I seen some of you shit at rapworld. but this shit was hard I like the word-play

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or eat you from the inside and hollow you up."- Beanie Sigel

"Stare gun in face
heart flutters dawg it's startin to race
stuck in my place
nowhere to turn, nowhere to go
death right around the corner soon as the gauge exsplode"- Me