i wrote this awhile ago...one of my many styles



brain waves collide and make my inner thoughts start to turn
the thought process is hard at work it makes my nerves start to burn
my mind starts to ache and throb but i don't even feel the pain involved
within a matter of seconds wordz will come and i'll be sayin em' raw
now the signal is sent, instructions transported down through the cord
half way down my neck they swing around to my jaw(doesn't rhyme if you read but i can make it work)
into my tongue, now to the tip, then they come out in one breath
but it's not complete, that's the end to only one step
thoughts must reform, combine with oxygen molecules and become airborne
then re-enter the bloodstream as the nitrogen base which is named adenine
flow through veins and vessels and venture through my anatomy
go from wrist to palm and see what as come from what i have wished upon
then knuckles to fingertips, piercin through one layer of skin
the holyist thoughts bout to escape and become the slayer of sins
out they burst, now they cursed, forced to flee into the keyboard
for ppl to look upon and reply,"hey, we wanna see more"
now the thoughts of one's mind are exposed onto the surface
with the sole purpose to get in ya system and make ya start to get nervous...

if i could get fav line and stuff like that it would be great

DIS WAZ SUM DOPE SHIT,IT MADE SENSE 2 ME,DA BETS LINES WAZ PROLLY:

my mind starts to ache and throb but i don't even feel the pain involved
within a matter of seconds wordz will come and i'll be sayin em' raw
now the signal is sent, instructions transported down through the cord
half way down my neck they swing around to my jaw

I UNDASTOOD DIS PART,IT FLOWED RIGHT,IF READ RIGHT,TAKEN CARE OF NICELY,STAY UP MUTHA FUKKA,1

hey thanks for the feedback. anyone else?

you got skills... liked this line
"out they burst, now they cursed, forced to flee into the keyboard
for ppl to look upon and reply,"hey, we wanna see more""
keep rhymin

yeah it was dope... i was feelin it, keep postin

thanks ppl....would anyone like to peep this?

anyone else wannahelp me?