On the corner of death I dwell in the depths of thought:
lost for words in this head of a moruner of tears that were bought:
I seek the masterpiece going out on a limb to win a loss I sought:
staring down into a well of weeping souls, crying from the dark:
trying to make it to heaven with one broken wing and a broken string on a harp:
I watched as he struggled to get on one foot and make ends meet:
how each step rendering into nothing and his voice was just as bleek:
still he made it to that well, to this point where his emotions desended:
pretended to be, where the hearts of the weak and the strong mended:
blended into one being, outlined with the mask of courage in a heart:
delogued in blood of modern man's pains of what it take to live today:
the ravarage savagery holds him back like slavery a hued hindered misery:
he tied to the loose ends and desended towards the watery surface:
a free angel falling, flailing battling with the winds and life's purpose:
curses echoed off the walls of his cage, raged encaved his existance:
anger was the enemy in lore in this game of tugof war, and let go with no resistance...


love....

damn.. pretty raw... vocab flow eerything was on point... i think i only fell off rhyme once but mighta been my fault im tired as hell

peace

Whoa This Was Deeply Written From Tha Alpha To Tha Omega

Both Of Which Opened Tha Piece Immaculately



Dayum Dope..

And Ended It In Tha Same Way



I Enjoyed This Bro, Its Also Nice To See Your Still Dropping Pieces

Hit Me Up For A Collab Or Sommit Sometime

Pz............................zP

This had a great rhyme structure, flow was good, and the vocab was real good. This was a nice piece. Keep spitten
8/10

Aight Rook, I will see about that in the mean time you can get at me via AIM, oORhombusOo , currently I am thinking about giving up the text thing, I dunno, but thanks for all the replies I appreciate it all..

love...