dont usually swear in my rhymes... but at the time i was especially mad... ah well check it..

fuck the dove, damn this search for true love,
cause i know for sure it dont end there, blinded by pretty eyes and long brown hair,
to hell with you and all your little sayings, this debt im dont paying,
i quit playing these little mind games, this man you wont tame, i'll claim my fame, then you'll scream my name,
too late you had your chance, you took your stance, pierced my heart with a lance,
for once you should've heard what i was preachin, teachin, now you just straight leechin,
im tired of little spanish snippets, my search? you tripped it, but your names insignificant as a "blippit",
2 years from now you'll never be thought of, fuck the the dove, you never showed me love,
you just another scared girl, would've gave you diamonds and pearls along with the world,
too late now, you just keep flyin but how?
i was holding you and you know it, my true feelings i'll show it,
im sick and tired of listening to you at night, i wouldve showed you the light, but you said "im out aight?",
never should've broke it off, ima show you the cost of what you lost, me? you shoulda never tossed,
one day you gonna need my help, you gonna yelp,
as i walk by, better yet fly through the sky, you best run and find a new guy, i've opened my eyes,
dont wanna be friends this is the end, dont pretend you want to start over again,
im gonna go out and find another dove, one that when push comes to shove, shows me love,
and while im at it i'll buy a 22, cock the hammer and shoot you,
you deceivein, you up for treason, its dove huntin season,
so dont try to hide, or confide, cause on the inside, im fuckin with your pride,
thinkin you got a friend in me?, dont mess with this emcee, im infectious like poision ivy,
this is the last rhyme i'll ever write about your ass, next time you see me put your head down and just pass....

Yo dogg, heart felt shit, deep as hell, I feel yo to the full, some good rhymin and I know exactly what yo sayin in your ideas man, can't disagree with shit comin straight from inside..

Peace Out Yo!!!!

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Man, i'm feelin' this shit too. Deep spit, only niggas with heart can do that yo. I'm uppin' you dogg, keep writing. Just work on your vocab. a little.

inspire thas some deep ass shit homie

This was coo' i liked the way you came off ya diggg...nice delivery. a brawd like me just now cummin bacc to the site and shyt so I'm scoping everybody....nice werk tho' thats a real good way to express ya feelings, we dont need anuther Osama runnin' around ;D get atcha gurl!!
*~Holler~*

^^i dont get that comment... otherwise thanks for all the postive feedback yall... much love... keep rhymin

I felt this on an emotional sense but on a lyrical sense it wasn't really my type. It didn't have a steady flow or something, to me it was just lacking in an area I just can't seem to point out so I'll just have to go with it wasn't my style or something. I can see you have talent though and I agree with a guy above me. Improve vocab you used a lot of the same words for rhymes in this piece... Keep elevatin

pz

yo inspire, tight work son i could feel u on dis one dawg ^des niggas tryin ta turn dis shit into a science and 1 not but tight work, keep elevatin
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damn, very emotional and frum the heart, did u go an beat sum kids up after writin it??

lmao...nice post homie....

Yeah, I can feel it...been there, done that...
Emotion remains ever flowing fodder for rap.
Love aint just a tattoo on the arm...
Love is what made me buy the farm.
It's how well you milk the cow...
that determines if you drink tommorrow...not only now.
Feelings destroy rational thinking.
Logic is a better wine for drinking.
Love aint Logic.
I agree, let it go.

uppin

up up and away!!

<----- can now feel this more than ever, i jes read it like 4 times, me an a girl are havin relationship trouble an its killin me...

DAmn Homey thats too emotional piece felt it all the way.....even thugs cry...lol man nice shit am fuckin wit ya wit the cryin shit...but keep up the goood WORk

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