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Old 03-18-03, 03:20 PM   #1
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you put a title to this

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Salam Alaikum...namsayin..aiyyo...check it out


yo columns categoric, fortunate forces,remorse is morbid
you fowardly door extorted enormous,infrom the sources
adoring the horses,embelems of vengence,mending the apendage
demented, and breath sent with intentions to bend percentages
send body fragments into sectors,infector,inspect the professor,refreshin the texture
extra pressure compressed with sadistic pleasure
fringes, syringes, intentions byngin on contradiction
depicktin suspession since Eygptians near Moses evicted..from perimisses
alert the crevices of Genesis, walkin with the center, before humans invented Lexuses
aquatic cavity, i face reality, duality, tragic and malody
while factories enslave our families
the wage is minimal, condition critical, it's pitiful
livin this difficult disease, invisible, subliminal
as thunder cracks the sky, the future's cast aside, i paralize
dairy is pasturized, yo you parasites in traffic pastorise
forget your glasses, wistful ignorance taxes the masses
and laughs at the absence, of classes of axis of abbots
knowledge is needed, feed the believers, repeat the teachins
instead of decievin, preachin the weakness, releasin demons
tappin phone recievers, agents invadin, tracin your statements
explainin behaviors, trainin your neighbors to stay survaillence...with a lame regard
they a danger squad,raping the name of God
try escapin, you gotta rip your faces off
you must retaliate it's a state of war

yo Salam Alaikum,violent nation, hold your arms and call your patriots
bombin nations, dishonest domination and confertations
abombination to bombers, they call us martyrs, with modern capeness
caught up in modern acres, till we dont exist like Islamic pagans
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Old 03-18-03, 04:38 PM   #2
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serious... I liked it.. as for a title.. ummm... how about.. "my shit's ill"....
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Old 03-18-03, 04:41 PM   #3
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good shit
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Old 03-18-03, 04:59 PM   #4
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"To Ill For A real Title"

^^^There you go...

Tight shit...for real, i liked it, your multi's are the nicest I've seen in a minute...

9/10

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Old 03-19-03, 09:14 AM   #5
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thanks for uppin...its good to get some feedback finally...glad you guys liked it and shit for real...one
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Old 03-19-03, 09:27 AM   #6
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.The Realness.

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For real, your rhyme was o.k. Some parts didn't make sense, you were just stickin' words and phrases in there so it could rhyme. Don't get me wrong, some parts are tight, some flow nicely, with nice multi's... but most of it is trash.
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Old 03-19-03, 09:41 AM   #7
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no offense but iguess it just went over your head....but thanks for the feedback dunny...more people should respond like you so i can try to figure out my flaws...thanks...one
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