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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

everyone's wasting time on 'building' this guy up so please rush-in and stop it
i could just waste money?
but all n-1's attempts at liftoff are failed miserably so lets just cancel this rocket


(n1= a Russian rocket that was never launched)

check...HA HAHA

Your rhymes make me laugh and your structure is wack, U don't understand....
I may not be a good "rocket", but hey, at least I can land..
Cause your punches don't hit, so are you tryna be funny?
I put you down, your first round, its like Muhammad verse Sonny...

....(THE GREATEST)


(Muhammad Ali knocked out Sonny Liston, First round, first minute...any boxing fan will know that though)

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Although these words, DIG, DEEP
They offer no relief...

saying your the g.o.a.t and i make u laugh? plus 'my punches dont scratch'
oh well you get no pussy ever fagot, and well i can always just pickup a gat

(a gat is a female goat plus a gun think about it its pretty simple )

H.T - Your first punch would be a decent nameplay... if he was N1.. its NTT, I believe.
So, that one doesn't hit hard.

NTT- Your first punch could've been doper with better wording... u should've encorporated the word punches in there somewhere would've connected it all better.

Your second punch wasn't much of a punch, you just made a statement about that fight and explained what it meant, nahmean?

HT - Your second punch i wasn't feeling. Again, don't explain your punches.. please.

Vote - NTT for his first punch, barely, even though the wording was iffy.

alright thanks for the vote man but in the set up an everything by civil it says n1 not nt i had no idea but its all good

uppin..





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Although these words, DIG, DEEP
They offer no relief...

both 1 bars are the hardest outta the 2 you guys got...

H.T nice flow and hit i understood ur punch better after i read the brake down of it nice...

N.T you had a nice flip on hes punch but felt like it wasnt a hard blow thou just a simple diss to me no hate...

vote: H.T ( for more original and creative punch rather then a basic feed )

Your rhymes make me laugh and your structure is wack, U don't understand....
I may not be a good "rocket", but hey, at least I can land..
I actually really liked this, needs to be reworded but I think the concept could have been dope
Cause your punches don't hit, so are you tryna be funny?
I put you down, your first round, its like Muhammad verse Sonny...
this was weak


everyone's wasting time on 'building' this guy up so please rush-in and stop it
i could just waste money?
but all n-1's attempts at liftoff are failed miserably so lets just cancel this rocket
concept was ok but your wording and structure is not
saying your the g.o.a.t and i make u laugh? plus 'my punches dont scratch'
oh well you get no pussy ever fagot, and well i can always just pickup a gat
Iv'e thought a female goat was a nanny? and punch is weak




vote NT

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HT....what happened man? i definately must have been confused as to who you are on rb. I apparantly have you confused with someone else, cuz he doesnt write like that. Anyways this is the deal. BOTH of you are having the exact same problem.
First and for most, your structure. You guys have to work on that rhyme scheme
and incorporating the right ammount of words in your bars. Shorten them up, dont try n saay so much. in a single punch, theres no point in tryin to say 3 or 4 different things. A punch should basically have 1 concept, set it up in your 1st bar..then hit it hard with a good finish in ya 2nd bar. Another thing, is the statements...the fact that you guys are trying to say sooo much in your bars. It comes off as a statement, you cant make a good punch with that many things being said. Go one direction with it, it will come off more effectively.

ill come back shortly and breakdown your bars, and try n explain what im saying

v/ N

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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

everyone's wasting time on 'building' this guy up so please rush-in and stop it
i could just waste money?
but all n-1's attempts at liftoff are failed miserably so lets just cancel this rocket
the flow of this is way off and the structure is weak as hell... kinda hurt just reading this... The punch was OKAY if his name was n1 and i can understand your confusing... thats the mods fault. but try to shorten ya bars up you really didnt need all those extra syllables

Your rhymes make me laugh and your structure is wack, U don't understand....
I may not be a good "rocket", but hey, at least I can land..
coo, nice flip... i kinda like it.
Cause your punches don't hit, so are you tryna be funny?
I put you down, your first round, its like Muhammad verse Sonny...
this was played and doesn't really hit hard, i felt you shoulda came harder with this bar

saying your the g.o.a.t and i make u laugh? plus 'my punches dont scratch'
oh well you get no pussy ever fagot, and well i can always just pickup a gat
okay even though this is short... this is stretched!! you have so much extra words in here that dont mean shit to the punch, take em out like a target... get short and sweet with your bars man, they easier to read like that... and regardless this punch doesn't hit

Okay i think ya'll need to focus on being short and sweet wit ya bars, theres no need for run on sentences. but The only real line i liked in this was NT first bar. soo

vote: NtT

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everyone's wasting time on 'building' this guy up so please rush-in and stop it
i could just waste money?
but all n-1's attempts at liftoff are failed miserably so lets just cancel this rocket

this was cool, the wording could have been better but it was still good to me


saying your the g.o.a.t and i make u laugh? plus 'my punches dont scratch'
oh well you get no pussy ever fagot, and well i can always just pickup a gat


this was lame

Your rhymes make me laugh and your structure is wack, U don't understand....
I may not be a good "rocket", but hey, at least I can land..

this was a good piggyback off his punch...basic, but kinda funny


Cause your punches don't hit, so are you tryna be funny?
I put you down, your first round, its like Muhammad verse Sonny...

this was a descent similie, nothin special, but okay


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Vote - N+T, both his disses were straight. H.T. only had one good punch.

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