all day i gona stomp on you motherfuckers//
becasue i am rideing on you bitches all day//
and you aint going to have no motherfucking say//
beacause i just ride down you streets all day//
i be sitten on the corner rolling the dice all god dam day//
now what you going to say when you see coming your way//
you just better go and run for the fucking hay//
now enough with me rideing on you pussy wanabies//
becasue if you want to be an mc you better not come with some fucking fecies//
i hope you are better then the last chump that i jumped//
becasue i stomped him so hard his dog went running from the fucking yard//
oh yea and that wasent his pet that was his bitch//
you better go get that bithes itch looked at chump//
now i am going to hand this mic over to you cumps now come get some!!!
i used the song:shook ones part2 instrumental to do this freestyle

Oi dogg, u need ALOT of work but u jus startin out so I'll give u a break, u really gotta work on yo vocab and what u say man.....

Peace Out Yo!!!!

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that was my first freestyle so come with some tips
so plz dont have to make me come out with the wips
that one just came to me

you not a gangster... and if you just happen to be one.... why are you posting on the internet?? lol... dont try to be so hard... just looks bad... come with something you actually know about... keep rhymin

aight dog heres my two cents, day day and day dont ryhme, here its vocab punches flow and conduction, ur off on about....4/4
like inspire said flow about sumthin u know, ur frm canada rhyme about stickin ur cock in pigs, FUCK CANADA

u an insult to canadian music... no fuckin' wonder we ain't gettin' no fuckin' respect.... you really need to elevate, serious...

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hey scarface
why dont i stick to fucking pigs//
why dont you stop fucking your sister and having the same kids//

ehhh how bout HELL NAH to that.
You gotta take the criticism to get elevate.

That up there was wack as hell, try reading some peoples up in here to get some tips. Don't steal shit either cuz we will find out.
Try to find their rhythm and maybe you'll find yours