what is this
its the wierd figure trying to connect with the dot
it curves like the crescent moon
hooking you like a snake grabbing its prey
its color is the black dim night making it hard to see
its tongue its like a chamelion
wondering
if the weather is going to be hot,cold,warm or even foggy
wondering
and then suprised

another simple one but it aint bad...good similes..nice imagery...a little touch of nature-like style kinda thing...but im still thinkin bout what u want the readers to understand by this piece..but i liked it..keeponit

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hmmmm--

I read this piece and i dont find much from it---I think you have the idea of how to make an abstract poem yet you dont put your all in the word play/meaning--not hating at all though keep it coming and i'll keep reading--this was written in riddle form which might throw the reader off--

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ya i agree...it would be easier if u went into detail in your poems..make it easier for us to understand...i knew what you were talkin about cause u had to write it 4 class..all in all keep doin what ya doin

same same same...upp the vocab...it would sorta make it kinna better