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Old 04-04-03, 09:36 PM   #1
SmoothCrmnl
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The crucifiction of my heart

IP: ABE5 5A5C

I lost myself deep in thought,

Caught in the midst of trying to love someone like you,

You who purposely lost the keys to my heart,

The heart which had been crushed a lifetime before you,

Passion burns inside me,

It's unbearable to love another who obtains no feelings for you,

Truly, love HURTS,

And who am I to trust another?

Should I give the spare keys to my house of love to you?

Then change the lock like you did to me?

I am dying inside,

A long and painful death,

awaiting my moment of truth,

Will you ever love me back?

Or should I keep my love locked away and intacked?

your decietful eyes and your majestic smile control my inner most thoughts and feelings,

Till that day when i wanna leave you and say,

'i won't take hearbreak no more'

Who am i to trust another?

Should I give the spare keys to my house of love to you?

Then change the lock like you did to me?

So I will never love anyone like you,

And until i find that special someone,

I will hold the keys close,

I love you and I always will.....

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I'm pullin these out of the wazoo...wrote this a while ago
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Old 04-05-03, 06:06 AM   #2
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At times this was akward and lacked some kind of flow...

...but it seemed straight from the heart...and was kind of packed with emotions...

...so i empathise with ya...and this piece was nice, but you still got to elevate...

...dotrako...(formerly respect)...
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Old 04-05-03, 01:40 PM   #3
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I like what u were trying to put out there, the only thing that could have made it better was if it was set up a little better....nice drop tho.


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Old 04-05-03, 08:04 PM   #4
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this nigga sucks ass...what the fuck u talkn bout....jk...(hes my bro)anyway i liek it it was coo man but i know u "can" elevate
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Old 04-06-03, 12:10 AM   #5
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thanx 4 da comments...uppin 4 mo'
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