This is the first rhyme I've posted. Let me know what you think.

Drip drop from an eyedropper.// Eyes squeezed tight shut over a blotter.// Open up your eyes and take a look around.// Take it all in from the skies up to the ground.// Two, four, six, eight its 10 o'clock you're running late.// Take this hit yo and dont be scared,// I'm on seven now and look how well I've fared.// If you're gonna be chillin wit my team// do what you want but don't bait out the scene.// Boys be smokin their blunts then they be turnin green.// Puking their guts out on the grass, from the grass.// Try to stand up again and fall on their ass.

first time ever to flow? Well hmmm..... adive time: Find a beat that "flow" had no flow to it at all.. umm.. yea work on vocabualry.. word play.. and other things too... seperate the bars too. OoNnEe