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04-18-03, 07:00 PM | #1 | ||||||
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my first spit
IP: 5153 3B92
it's been awhile i've been in the lab now i'm ready to ~attack~
all you niggas on my list so start runnin like you on ~track~ cus i'ma have my ~pack~ with me so watch ya ~back~//1 you niggas thought i was hiddin think again i was ~trainin~ and ~regainin~ my strength preparin for the ~pain~ to comeback hardcore to the ~brain~//2 i'm frustrated with you niggas always kickin me ~down~ to the ~ground~ i felt like i was a disrace to what i ~surround~ but now i improved so watch me ~astound~//3 i'ma retaliate with my ~army~ better think twice before you ~disarm me~ take a look at ya nigga that tried to ~harm me~ i showed him leather face before the ~alarm G~//4 better be cuatious when you hear me ~rap~ it's equivalent to a death ~trap~ ya body will be parolized and ~collapse~//5 i'll admit it i ain't black or~white~so don't look for me cus i'm outta ~sight~ i must be ~invisible~ cus i ain't even ~visible~ in the~bright~light~//6 this is my first post so plz give me some suggestions |
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04-19-03, 12:32 AM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: 399E F0FD
can anyone give me advice on my verse
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04-19-03, 08:45 AM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 330D 2B5B
nope, shits pretty much garbage...umm just freestyle
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04-20-03, 12:45 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 5153 3B92
dont put those squigly lines ~
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04-20-03, 01:03 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 9B91 D0C6
That Invisible line had potental but you just used it wrong try switching it up
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04-25-03, 03:34 PM | #6 | ||||||
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IP: B248 6474
it wasn't too bad just work on it and keep tryin'....practice makes perfect
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04-25-03, 04:21 PM | #7 | ||||||
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IP: AC21 E638
keep elevatin, don't use ~word~, ~word~
annoying!, lol |
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04-27-03, 08:32 AM | #8 | |||||||
.-.Marxism.-.
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IP: 80CF 5214
damn... took my comments... (freeposting to look like a vet)
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