this somethin i just thought about so give me some feedback
or suggestions

i know you heard my style drivin all the girls wild/
like the couples grindin on the floor tile/
you know i'm the illest nigga out fo the game/
the reallist nigga out to entertain/
i don't care critize all you want it just makes me stronger in the mind/
i'll say things that will make you wanna rewind/
and hear it again and again/
i know you ain't my friend so why you gotta pretend/
i know i should think before i say shit that i don't intend/
fuck it i'll say whatever i feel like i should say/
i must be a bad influence on kids cus parents make them stay away/
you know kids don't listen to moms and dads when they should/
they live in the hood and i know they wouldn't even if they could/
nigga you don't know i don't think you understand me fully/
look at me i'm just tryna be an emcee/
you don't know what i'm been through i'm sick of hearin lies it gives fuel/
to turn into somebody cruel like those freaks that drool/
the mic is my tool i turn into somebody new my split personality/
it could be dangerous it's my brains fatality/
i'm like dr. jackyl and mr. hied that's a good example for a skitzo/
it must of been all my anger buildin up from livin in the ghetto/
i kept it all bottled inside it must of over filled now i'm about to explode/
cus all my anger and pain put me in kill mode/
if i hear one wrong word i'll ty to ignore it like it never occured/
but if you keep goin i'll blow up on what i heard/
i'ma eplode like a fuckin grenade cus you know i'm a renegade/
so stay away until my anger fades/

It was pretty decent. good word play OoNnEe

this is my third ryhme on this site thanx
still uppin

uppin

much much better then the first spit i saw paco,very nice indeed,keep elevating constantly...nice spit
bismillah

thnx still uppin

it was aight, betta then anythin i herd frum u, it seems like ur improvin as u write keep postin, i wanna hea more from u, peacz out

a'ight thnx still uppin

uppin

it was tight dawg good word play work on the flow
im not criticizin cause i know my shit aint down pat yet
but practice makes perfect

thnx dawg uppin

nice drop. good wordplay but flow was a lil choppy. still real nice. keep spittin...