i sit with a pale gaze and watch over
the earth that remains stopped shorter
of the borders it could have reached itself
if the corriders opened it could teach its help
and reach the wealth of mindstate ingenious.
and teach itself to possess a life like jesus.
believe it that we have closed the path to this.
repitition is a monster and his wrath is sick.
pass a drip of acid on the open fire burns.
and teach the teachers not to teach concerns.
that have no relevance and already been learned
cease the cure for the state of open mindness.
algebra and calculus are the borders that bind us.
confine us to blindness make the earth the victim.
school happens to be the bars of my minds prison.
stop teaching others discoveries and tying the belt.
let us live free and expand borders by ourselves.

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these replies sucked testicularically cancered ballsack.

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feeling the topic..i did one similar few days ago^lmao at newbs
anyway the flow was good....good vocab and the concept was good
can see what ur getting at cos i got a similar view

'cease the cure for the state of open mindness.
algebra and calculus are the borders that bind us
^dope
rest was on point too..good short drop with a meaning
peep my 'Death' drop if u please

yo, ya still need to drop in our FREESTYLE audio battle that was started some 6 days ago..........................
the quicker you get it posted, the more i'll stop postin in everything you write........................
plus you wanted the fuckin battle..................

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Rhyming/Flow
Not ONe Flaw, Flowed Smooth as A Babys Bottom...lol! Rhymes Were Rhymed To Pefection! 9/10

Vocab/Wordplay
Was Dope As Usual. Wouldn't Expect Anything Less From You, the earth that remains stopped shorter - Wordplay Was Immaculate As Well...9/10

Concept/Topic
Not A PLayed Out Topic By Any Sense! Stuck To It As Usual, Perfected It in Your Own Unique Style..word..9/10

Overall
9/10, A Tight Perfected Drop As per Usual - Wouldn't expect to See AnyThing Else!

Word!

cease the cure for the state of open mindness.
algebra and calculus are the borders that bind us
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
said above but that line was dope man..

Flow: This flowed smoothly man, easy to read..9/10
Wordplay/Vocab: Voacb was tight, all yo lines didn't jus have little elementry words..9/10
Concept: Tight man, said earlier hasn't been played...Followed it, didn't go off course..9/10

Overall: 9/10

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